**REV105 · r3 · 2026-09-07 08:50 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — verification of **DES105 r3, the Campaign page at r8 (0cafb9, 08:31 UTC)**, against PMR008 §1 and REV105 r2's three clauses; PMR008's qualifications of r2 accepted, two of them corrections of this page's own arithmetic, recorded first below. **The situation changed under PMU008:** the owner rejected PM's pitch deck as barely understandable, created **The Visionary** with authority to change or remove mechanics that do not serve one identity, and the Visionary has published a Game vision on the Brief (0fff74). PM's priority is now the vision, and this role's next assignment (Tasks 1c38ca) is to review the vision submission when it exists — "does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction?" — which is not pre-empted here. REV105 r2–r1 are on the [REV105 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV105 r2 42ad46 · r1 35cccf · REV104 r6 ce94e4 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).

| Artifact | Revision | UTC (9-07) | Note |

| **Campaign — DES105 r3 (page r8)** | 0cafb9 | 08:31 | Diffed against de4893; §3.2's later return re-tallied on both plans with the clock; the changed return's two corrected clauses; §3.4's new scoping; the section written for the Visionary; §2's decision-test passage |

- **The lure's clock.** r2 wrote of the later return: "9:00 planted and armed: 8 units = eighty seconds ✓… expires on the dock road ✓." Armed at 9:00, eighty seconds runs to 10:20; the extraction was at 9:40. The page's claim could not be true and this review repeated it — the same error r6 found in the Exchange's first expedition, made by adding units without adding the clock. Withdrawn.

| Item | Quoted at 0cafb9 | Status |

| Clause 1 — the apron at expiry | The stay: "had the expedition run on, it would have expired at about 9:55, and the bodies on the apron would then retarget to the lit summit lamp and climb, because a crowd whose beacon dies goes to the nearest reachable lit one and spreads only if there is none" | **Closed** |

**The later return's ledgers, re-tallied with the clock.** *Quick plan:* 0:00 the heavy, 5 dropped, 5 collected, 5 stored; 3:30 the bundle into a free cell (three items, one bundle, four empty ✓); 5:00 the crank outside any ring; 5:30 extraction, 5 lost at the dock, the bundle banked. **Closes.** *The stay:* 8:00 the second surge climbs toward the lit tram; 9:00 the foot; 9:05 planted and armed, 5 units (or 8 with the margin) committed; the crossing 25 s inside 50 (or 80); 9:40 extraction with the beacon lit and about half its charge burned, the rest left with it; expiry at 9:55 (or 10:25) after the surveyor has gone, the apron's bodies then climbing to the summit lamp. **Closes**, and the arithmetic now includes the clock.

1. **The Exchange's cadence.** §3.4: dispatches "at 3:00 and 8:00". The Exchange r3 §2: "dispatches at about 3:00 and 7:00, with the evacuation window from 10:00", and its §7 scene is built on 7:00. One number, either page; the Exchange's is the one with a scene on it.

1. **Can the later visit be played by repeating the first solution?** Yes, and the page now says that is the point: "the return that understanding makes easy… the player who knows supply is withheld has an empty yard to work in, and that is the payoff of the Collector's lesson." Under the vision's own test — name the choice, its visible consequence, the part of the experience it serves — the later return's worthwhile decision is not the crossing; it is the standing state: leave the tram lit at the summit so that later surges climb away from the dock road, at the cost of "the depot gates dark for every later visit, because the lamp at the summit needs Rail." That choice has a visible consequence on the next visit's board and serves the refuge half of the experience. The trust-or-stay choice is thinner: on the written path the player has read the Exchange's drums, so the stay has no reason for them; it is a real alternative for a player who has not, and the page should say the decision that carries this visit is the standing state, with the stay as the alternative for the less-informed player rather than as a peer choice.

The lead's new section "For the Visionary" states the experience in plain words and three tensions — mastery against renewal, precision against plain speech, the refuge at stake without a tax — each with links to scenes; tension one is the honest form of the disagreement REV105-1 started. Districts r12 §2.0 withdraws the lever ladder as the reason for the count and re-runs the seven districts against the vision's test in plain language; Enemies r10 §0A runs the roster against the cut condition and names the Heavy as the role nearest the line. Those are the domain owners doing what PMU008 asks, and they are not reviewed here. This role's next review is of the Visionary's submission — one expedition as a player experiences it and a keep/change/remove assessment — when it exists, against the question Tasks sets: does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction. Until then, the Tram sequence at 0cafb9 has two cells left in §3.4 and nothing else from this role.

Superseded reviews: [REV105 r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2) · [REV104 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r1) and earlier on the REV104 archive · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.

| Finding | Raised in | Status |

| REV104-11 — the cable reel | REV104 r3 | Closed on the contract; the Exchange's terminals now placed by the lead in §3.4, with one contradiction (cell 2 above) |

- **Verdict:** on the Tram sequence — the three clauses and PMR008 §1's items are closed at 0cafb9; two cells remain in §3.4 and one sentence naming the later return's carrying decision. On the whole — not this role's to give under PMU008; the vision review is the next assignment and waits for the Visionary's submission.