| **Campaign — DES104 r2** | b92234 | 18:37 | Read in full and diffed against 9d3590. §3's three expeditions re-tallied beat by beat on the eight-cell rack under the contract r3's priority rule |

The package is what PMR006 calls it, the first coherent skeleton, and it is coherent in the places this role tested first: the contract r3 states the rules in one place and now carries D023, D024 and REV104-1, -3 and -4 as rules; the three deep districts are redrawn on eight cells with the priority rule and **all three ledgers close arithmetically**, which closes REV104-7; the Lock Flight's refuge consequence has a replacement (the service assembly); the Tidal Barrier's floaters now walk to the lit beacon (REV104-10a closed) and its header count is fixed; the owner page's four beats each point at a designed page. Two districts pass the pre-registered six on paper.

What still fails, at b92234 and 59f895: the Tidal Barrier's 4:30 harvest is still collected from a minute away (REV104-6, unchanged text); Stop's effect on dispatch is stated three incompatible ways across the contract, the world page and the Head-works, two of which PMR006 accepted in the same report (REV104-12, new); the contract's cable reel is not the item its owner defines, and the Exchange outline rests on the difference (REV104-11, new); the first battery in each written expedition is still filled by a beat outside the pursuit and collection rules (REV104-8); the new panels still do not say which position selects which intake or what flashes (REV104-9); the contract and the Campaign adopted a Heavy wording its author withdrew and PM rejected (REV104-13, new); one notebook sentence (REV104-10b). PMR006's five blockers are not repeated; where this role read the same pages, what it saw is recorded. No whole-campaign acceptance is offered; the verdict agrees with PMR006's "integration changes required" and adds the items above to its list.

| Item | At b92234 / 59f895 / da3639 | Status |

**3.1 The Lock Flight, lockkeeper.** `C C B I / S S . .`, link B→C, priority: the one battery. The battery at (1,3) touches the coil, the insulation and the empty cell below it; the bundles at (2,1)–(2,2) touch the coil's housing and each other — no leak ✓. 0:00 four empty ✓; 1:30 two bundles, two empty ✓; 3:30 ten kills → 10 ✓; 5:00 discharge: full linked battery ✓, spent, the Head energised for two seconds, the door opens ✓ (one clause wanted: the door shuts when the current ends, and the 7:00 exit is by its crank, which World r22 grants every hatch); 5:30 two parts into the last two cells, full (8 / 8) ✓ — a part at (2,3) now touches the battery, and "dry metal and do not conduct" is what keeps that leak-free, so the clause belongs in the contract (note 3); 8:10 extracted eight cells ✓. **Closes: dropped 10, collected 10, spent 10, lost 0.** Open: REV104-8 (3:30), REV104-9 and -10b.

**3.2 The Tram Incline, tram crew.** `C C Bc A / I Ba K S`, links Bc→C, Ba→A, priority Bc then Ba. Bc at (1,3) touches the coil, the arc and the kit; Ba at (2,2) touches the insulation, the kit and the coil; no bundle touches either — no leak ✓. Ba→A crosses cells, which E4 now allows ("links may cross any cells") ✓. 3:30 the heavy's mote → 5 / 0 ✓ (first on the list). 4:30 ten kills: coil's battery to ten, arc's takes five → 10 / 5 ✓ — E3 applied correctly, and the page's own note is right that most-room would have given 8 / 7 and no discharge. 5:30 spread ✓ (no lit beacon reachable). 6:00 one bundle → full ✓. 9:40 15 lost at the dock ✓. **Closes: dropped 15, collected 15, lost 15 at the dock.** Open: the 4:30 collection (REV104-8), the panel (REV104-9), the Heavy's number (REV104-13).

**3.3 The Tidal Barrier, tidewatcher.** `C C B K / S S I S`, link B→C. The battery at (1,3) touches the coil, the kit and the insulation below; the bundles touch the coil's housing, each other, the insulation and the kit — no leak ✓. 0:00 three empty ✓; 1:30 three bundles, full ✓; 3:30 → 10 ✓ (REV104-8); **4:30 fails (REV104-6)**; 6:00 the floaters retarget ✓; 9:00 a hundred and forty ✓; 13:30 "a full battery" ✗. **Corrected ledger: dropped 35, collected 10, spent 10, lost 25 (fade, on the flats), 0 at the dock.**

Unchanged from r2, quoted above against the same text. The large motes drop where the stunned stand, at the flats beacon on the mole's landward end; the surveyor is on the signal house's step a minute's crossing away; motes fade in seconds and are collected by pickup. Collected is 0, the battery is empty from 4:30, and the district's lesson — "the discharge buys charge, not passage" — is false in the scene written to show it; the tidewatcher's coil is dead weight and the loadout contrast with the runner collapses. **Category:** contradiction (scene versus clause 4). **Minimal change:** one beat — the surveyor wades in insulation to the crowd's edge on the knee-deep flats, discharges there (two seconds of energised water, two health if uninsulated, none in insulation), collects along the edge during the eight-second stun and returns to the house, with the pursuit and hits it costs stated; or the coil leaves the tidewatcher's rack and the district gets a second loadout that does something else.

- **Where:** contract r3 clause 3: a district dispatches "when its drum's contact closes and the trunk is carrying time… either alone stops announced surges"; its §9 table lists "the governor's Stop or Keep" under what changes trunk permission, and its Stop paragraph says "The relay drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; supply does not, because the Collector's wheels stop cycling the Flood" — silent on whether permission survives. World r22's table, aligned to the contract: trunk permission after Stop, "Gone everywhere: the brake stops the shaft; no district is permitted"; local timing after Stop, "Drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; without permission they make no pulse." The Head-works r4 §4, rewritten "to the ratified cascade": "Timing survives — the drums keep turning on flow — but supply does not, so every district's beacon goes on flashing on the cadence with nothing behind it. Stop is the empty flash everywhere, for good."

- **Where:** contract r3 clause 1: "the cable reel (a laid conductor between two wet points across dry ground; it carries environmental power only and never charges a battery)". Contract §10 gives the catalogue to "Equipment and its item pages". Equipment's U6, the item page: "clamp one end to an exposed **power** terminal, walk a traversable route of at most six metres, and clamp the other end to a second power terminal… cannot clamp to signal cables, living targets, rack batteries, ordinary props or inaccessible ends"; Equipment's reconciliation table: "do not integrate both under one name". Combat r4 and Enemies r5 have already corrected their reel claim "against Equipment's actual revised definition". Campaign §3.4: "Conduction across the dry hall is by the cable reel."

Unchanged text at b92234, quoted in the table above. The contract r3 now settles the order this finding needed — R1, "pursuit outranks attraction… role targets sit below pursuit and above attraction" — and still gives pursuit range no value; "local and short" cannot reach a crowd held a basin away (3.1) or across a crossing the page itself prices at a minute (3.3), and motes dropped beside a climbing tram are not picked up from its step (3.2). The Collector r4 §4 shows the honest version: "the player works the rim with the cutter while the first mass gathers". **Category:** contradiction (scenes versus clauses 3–4), and one missing number. **Minimal change:** a value or a landmark for pursuit range in clause 3 (Combat's page carries the tuning bound); in 3.1 and 3.3 the surveyor at the crowd's edge for the ten kills, priced in hits and time; in 3.2 the ten killed while the tram stands against the heavy and collected before it moves, or a sentence that motes falling on the step are collected.

Unchanged text at b92234. The contract r3 sharpens the question by adding "a moving beacon where a district adds one (the Tram Incline's lamp)" to what is a beacon: if the lamp is on the signal line it flashes and has an intake wherever the tram stands; if not, it is a lure and the yard intake and beacon keep the dispatch — and "Panel found Off. Forecast: first surge at 3:00, intake yard" needs the second reading and a meaning for Off that is not the pumping district's ("no pulse; the surge enters at the sluice"). In §3.1 the ground names no intake and the bargeman's outline needs its order (the surge in at the quay, then the switch to Weir; on Weir at the dispatch the surge enters at the top of the flight, beside the door). **Category:** missing design detail, in the contract's core. **Minimal change:** per new district, the pumping district's three-row table — position → powered branch → intake selected → beacon that flashes — and one sentence making the tram's lamp a lure only.

- **Where:** contract §10, R8's disposition: hit counts permitted "and a resistance stated as 'cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time'". Campaign §3.2's diff: "Heavies: an enemy role that blocks rails and doorways, cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time… (Combat's wording)"; the 3:30 beat: "The surveyor kills it from the step in the seconds the cutter needs" — r1 had "ten hits in five seconds". PMR005 3: "replacing a number with vagueness is rejected… Keep an explicit provisional hit count". Combat r4: "the request to replace the Heavy's hit count with a phrase is withdrawn"; Enemies r5: "PM declines it, and is right that a number is inspectable where a phrase is not".

"the panel cannot light [the door] without lighting the road, but the coil can": the weir beacon's circuit "energises the Head", so a discharge into the Head lights the weir beacon for its two seconds, as the coil route lights B2 in the pumping district. No crowd moves; the sentence is the §1 error PMR002 caught at REV102. One sentence.

- Contract §9 and World r22 say the Collector's wheels stop "without the harvest that drives its gates"; the Collector r4 §2 has the gates hand-worked ("none is powered") and the powered thing a return lift, and reconciles both pages on that distinction. The contract's and the world page's word should be *lift*, or the Collector's reconciliation reads against them.

1. *Coil window.* Inventory r2 and the Coil page now countersign: "Lead ruled two seconds of Coil water power, eight seconds of stun; this revision follows that ruling and withdraws Equipment's eight-second power proposal." Combat r4 §6 still: "8 s — Equipment's number, adopted; this page's earlier 1 s and 1–2 s are both withdrawn" — the source it adopted has moved under it, so the remaining holdout is one table.

Per district, the pre-registered six: the Lock Flight and the Tram Incline pass on paper with REV104-8/-9 as the gaps (and -13 for the Tram); the Tidal Barrier passes five and fails its loadout contrast as written (REV104-6); the Collector r4 and the Head-works r4 pass on paper, with REV104-12 the Head-works' one rule error; the Exchange is an outline whose one tool is two items (REV104-11). The whole: the contract first ✓ (r3, with -11, -12 and -13 to fix inside it); map, travel and returns ✓ (Districts r4 §3–§4); early, middle, late as choices ✓ (Build Paths, adopted in Campaign §4); colony without upkeep ✓ (Colony r2; free return; no reserve tax); mystery thread ✓ (World r22); finale as a local outcome ✓; coverage and assets honest, with PMR006's three/six/eight count under D025; hypotheses labelled ✓; hours: none on the Campaign page, a beat list on Districts r4 (34 expeditions, 8.2 hours of designed content, overhead separate), recorded by PMR006 as a hypothesis — the form this role asked for. Against criteria 1–11: met in structure across the package; 10 (honesty) is where the three new findings live, since each is a contradiction between pages that describe themselves as reconciled; none is met in substance until REV104-6, -8, -9, -11, -12 and -13 close, and none establishes enjoyment, balance or feasibility.

Whether the Stop cascade is legible at one district per expedition; whether the priority list reads as list-keeping (the page's own hypothesis); whether a moving beacon reads at crowd density; the bank's standing cost; eight hours of designed content as a length.

Superseded reviews: [REV104 r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r2) · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.

| Finding | Raised in | Status at b92234 / 59f895 / da3639 |

| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13; REV103-1 to -9 | REV101–REV103 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |

| REV104-7 — D023 in the contract and the Campaign | REV104 r2 | **Closed at b92234 and 59f895**; ledgers re-tallied and closing |