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**REV103 · r4 · 2026-09-06 16:30 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — review of **DES103 r7, the Design Document at revision r13**, and **World and Mystery r17**, the two revisions PMR003 asked for. Both were saved before REV103 r3 existed (r13 three minutes before, r17 two seconds before), so each closure below quotes its correction and the one item neither could have read is carried. REV103 r3–r1 are on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV103 r3 dcd90e · r2 3ff337 · r1 285925 · REV102 r6 538724 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).

| Artifact | Revision | UTC | Note |

| --- | --- | --- | --- |

| **Design Document — DES103 r7 (document r13)** | 50046f (r12 50840d) | 16:13 | Against PMR003 and REV103 r2: the arrival/stun/burst sequence; "can reach"; stale handoffs replaced; the valve table, two supplies and coil-route qualification as lead proposals; state tables and ledgers moved to a new Appendix C. Diffed against r12; §13 re-tallied |

| **World and Mystery — WLD102 r17** | 26f497 (r16 812fd6) | 16:16 | PMR003 2 in full: valve table (V, V2, V3: found shut, set open; connectivity, not order; success = the sluice-head lamp); two supplies; drain R above V3's weir; the coil-route qualification; the workshop clause removed. States that r13 needs only the weir clause to match |

| Tasks 6e92d0, PM Reviews e71669, Brief 28fb1c | unchanged | | |

r13 and r17 resolve REV103-6 and -7 and half of -8 exactly as asked, and the ledgers now live where the owner need not read them. What remains: the one-unit residual of REV103-2, which only REV103 r3 raised; the weir clause the world designer added after r13, which §11 must lift; the stale sentence at the end of the live PM report; and one question the finale's supply answer opens rather than closes — whether the relay's channel is energised water or flowing water — which decides whether opening the three valves lights the yard from the relay's side. No verdict is offered on r14 before it exists.

| Item | Correction | Verified |

| --- | --- | --- |

| **REV103-2** (residual) — the scene alternates; the rule fills the emptier battery first | r13 predates REV103 r3. §13 still: "Two stragglers, two motes, collected into the first battery"; "kills sixteen… the coil's battery from two to ten, the arc's from nothing to eight"; Appendix C ledger 3:00 "2 / 0", 7:30 "10 / 8" | **Open, unchanged.** Under §5's rule the tally is 1 / 1 at 3:00 and 9 / 9 at 7:30, and §8's discharge needs a full battery. Seventeen kills, or one straggler's mote on the way to the hall, closes it |

| **REV103-6** — stun, arrival and burst timing | r13 §13: "**8:20.** With about sixty of them in the water, the second discharge: they stop, stunned for eight seconds; six large motes… collected along the channel's edge during the stun"; "The burst: for ten seconds the cutter's hits jump body to body through the packed, recovering crowd… The burst is spent on a recovering crowd, not a stunned one, because a stun lasts eight seconds and a burst ten; how many it kills is a proposal, not a demonstrated outcome." Ledger rows 8:20 and 8:30 match | **Resolved.** Dispatch 8:00, channel full by 8:20, stun to 8:28, burst from 8:28 — one sequence on one clock |

| **REV103-7** — the finale's causal explanation | r17: the valve table ("V… shut (opened in tier two)… open; V2, the pool valve… shut… open; V3, the head valve… shut… open"; "Success condition: the sluice-head lamp… lights while the yard is lit or during a discharge in the pool; any of the three left shut leaves it dark. Order never matters"); the coil route ("a crowd held by the still-lit B1 stays where it is"); the Shut row ("the workshop stays useful"); two supplies with "Drain R sits on the relay's feed above V3's weir, so opening it empties only the relay's channel: the head pool, the junction pool and the yard channel keep their water". r13 §11 carries the same valve table and supplies as lead proposals, without the weir clause | **Resolved on the world page; §11 lacks the weir clause** — without it, "The drain valve empties the relay's feed… and touches nothing else" is false with the valves open, as r17 says. One clause to lift (the mirror rule) |

| **REV103-8** — superseded live wording | §1: "so any crowd that **can reach** it and has no nearer lit beacon starts toward it". Appendix B's "Open handoffs" replaced. But the live **PM report** paragraph (r13's own, line 559) still ends: "One PM request: rule on the routing model… and say whether the alternative still goes to the owner as a decision" — ruled at D016, answered, and now stated in decision 3 | **Half resolved**; one sentence to delete |

- **Where:** World r17 and r13 §11, the relay chain's Understand row: "The relay is a device under clause 2: it works only while its channel carries current"; and the two-supplies paragraph: "the relay has always run on the sluice-head channel that feeds it, its own [always-wet] water… the door is on the pool side's dead line and is fed only when V, V2 and V3 join that water to a lit yard or to a discharge"; the valve table: V3 joins the head pool to "the sluice-head channel that feeds the relay"; the success condition: the lamp lights "while the yard is lit or during a discharge".

- **Why it is unresolved:** the document uses "current" for electricity everywhere else, and clause 1 says current flows through water to everything the water connects. If the relay's channel is *energised* water (as "a device under clause 2… carries current" says), then opening V3, V2 and V joins it to the head pool, the junction pool and the yard channel, and the yard beacon, the hatch and the sluice-head lamp light from the relay's side with the panel on causeway or off — the success condition is wrong, the "price" is permanent while the valves are open, and the finale's access is a lure the pages do not price. If instead the relay's channel is *flowing* water that turns the drum — which "always-wet", "empties the relay's feed and stops the drum" and the weir all suggest — then the relay is hydraulic, not "a device under the power clause", and the chain's sentence must say so; the door is then the only electrical thing at the head, and everything else in r17 holds.

- **Consequence:** small in words, but it is the one physical fact the finale rests on, and the two readings give different games at the sluice head.

- **Category:** missing design detail (one sentence; the world designer's, then mirrored in §11).

- **Minimal change:** state which. The hydraulic reading needs the least: "The relay is not on the power clause: its drum is turned by the water flowing in its feed, and that water carries no charge; drain R stops the flow. The door beside it is electrical, on the pool side's dead line." Then the valve table, the success condition and the drain's effect are all true as written.

Everything credited at REV103 r3, plus: the arrival/stun/burst sequence; §1's rule wording; the finale's valve table and supplies on both pages (subject to REV103-9); Appendix C holding the state tables and both ledgers, which leaves §12 and §13 as prose for the owner — the length note from REV103 r2, taken. Expedition one still closes to the unit; expedition six closes once REV103-2's one unit is fixed.

Superseded reviews: [REV103 r3](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r3-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r4) · [r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r2) · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.

| Finding | Raised in | Status |

| --- | --- | --- |

| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13 | REV101, REV102 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |

| PMR002 1–4; PMR003 1a, 1b, 1d, 3 | PM | Met in r13 |

| REV103-1, -3, -4, -5 | REV103 r1–r2 | Resolved at r10–r12 |

| REV103-6 — stun, arrival, burst | REV103 r3 | **Resolved at r13** |

| REV103-7 — finale: valves, supplies, coil route, workshop | REV103 r3 | **Resolved at World r17; §11 needs the weir clause** |

| REV103-8 — superseded live wording | REV103 r3 | **Half resolved**: §1 done; one PM-report sentence remains |

| **REV103-2** (residual) — one unit at the discharge threshold | REV103 r1, r3 | **Open** — not yet read by the lead |

| **REV103-9** — the relay's channel: energised or flowing | REV103 r4 | **Open** — World first, then §11 |

- **Task:** REV103. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV103 r4 (this page); r3 moved to the REV103 archive verbatim.

- **Reviewed:** Design Document 50046f in full, diffed against 50840d; World and Mystery 26f497, diffed against 812fd6. §13 re-tallied under §5's rule; every closed item's correction quoted; the finale's supply sentences read on both pages against clauses 1 and 2.

- **Changed decisions:** none by this role.

- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences and the tally. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.

- **Verdict:** revise — REV103-2 (one kill or one mote), the weir clause into §11, one sentence deleted from the PM report, and REV103-9 (one sentence on the world page, then mirrored). r13 and r17 have done everything else PMR003 and REV103 r3 asked.

- **Remaining risk:** REV103-9 is the only item that could be a design change rather than a sentence; the hydraulic reading makes it a sentence.

- **Next handoff:** world designer — REV103-9; lead — REV103-2, the weir clause, the PM-report sentence. I review the resulting revisions when they exist and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.

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**REV103 · r2 · 2026-09-06 16:12 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — review of **DES103 r4, the Design Document at revision r10**, which was written against PMR002's closing review, World r16 and REV102 r5/r6 — three minutes before REV103 r1 existed — and so resolves two of r1's four items on its own and leaves two. Present-tense, revision-specific, on the same ledgers. REV103 r1 is on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV103 r1 285925 · REV102 r6 538724 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).

| Artifact | Revision | UTC | Note |

| --- | --- | --- | --- |

| **Design Document — DES103 r4 (document r10)** | 8afa59 (r9 fb6b6d) | 15:54 | Diffed against r9. §12 and §13 are byte-identical to r9, so REV103 r1's ledgers apply unchanged. New: §11 mirrors World r16; owner page and §16 sentences corrected; battery glossary entry; two-battery electrician drawn with a new "a module accepts one link" rule; PM's vertical-coil arrangement added; burst nominal = actual |

| PM Reviews — PMR002 completed checkpoint | 6e8d12 | 15:53 | Processed snapshots recorded; "exact-revision REV103" prioritised; nothing new assigned |

| Clarity Questions — Q41 | e183b1 | 15:55 | Licence codes in §14 as if interchangeable; verified below |

| Tasks ab97dc, Brief 28fb1c, World and Mystery 812fd6 | unchanged | | |

r10 resolves REV103-3 and every part of REV103-4 without having read them, because the same corrections came from the world designer and PM. What remains is the two items whose text r10 did not touch — one leftover sentence and one rule its own examples disobey, which r10 has now made load-bearing — plus one criterion-8 sentence the reader is right about. Each is a line. The document's rules, scenes and finale otherwise hold under the ledgers; nothing here is a rule change. No verdict is offered on r11 before it exists.

| Item | Where in r10 | Status |

| --- | --- | --- |

| **REV103-1** — §12's leftover sentence; two ledger cells | §12 (line 340): "Rack now: coil, battery, three bundles, one slot empty, and one drip, because a bundle touches the battery." still follows the corrected text; the 9:00 kills' motes are still absent from the ledger; the 5:00–7:30 drip timing is unchanged | **Open** — unchanged from r9 |

| **REV103-2** — the collection rule versus both scenes | §5 (line 144): "A collected mote goes to the linked battery with the most room" unchanged; §13 3:00 still collects into an unlinked battery; §13 6:00 still fills the fuller battery first. **New in r10:** §6's profitable electrician `S C C / I B B` — "a module accepts one link, so the second battery is storage until it is relinked to the coil in a shelter." Under the collection rule as written, an unlinked battery collects nothing, so the storage battery cannot store: the loadout r10 draws to show the profit cannot make one | **Open, and now load-bearing** |

| **REV103-3** — §11's Fix ending vs World r16 and §4 | §11 now "the world designer's (their revision r16…); their page owns it and this section mirrors it": reaching the room, inside the room, each ending; "the clamp fixes the signal cable only, so the panel's power positions still work… and no door is open or shut forever" | **Resolved** |

| **REV103-4** — three stale sentences | Owner page: "This document has been reviewed by an independent critic and by PM, and revisions remain open; no review is evidence that it is fun, balanced or saleable." §16: the External Critic "a member since Brief D015… PM has since disposed of it". Appendix A: "**Battery:** the one-slot module that stores charge, ten units; it powers the one module it is linked to, and leaks into any wet bundle it touches" | **Resolved** |

- **PM's vertical-coil arrangement** `S C B / S C S`, link B→C: the battery at (1,3) touches the coil and the lower-right bundle only; the two left bundles touch the coil's housing and each other and never reach the battery. **One drip, as stated.** Three bundles with no drip is indeed impossible: with the coil vertical, the battery's remaining neighbour is a bundle in every placement.

- **The two-battery electrician** `S C C / I B B`, link lower-right B→C: the linked battery touches the coil and the storage battery; the storage battery touches the coil and the insulation; the one bundle touches the coil and the insulation. **No leak, as stated.** Its purpose fails only for the reason in REV103-2.

- The harvester and arc hauler are unchanged from r9 and still leak-free.

- **Where:** §14: OpenGameArt's assets "are offered under one of CC0, CC-BY 3.0/4.0, CC-BY-SA 3.0/4.0, OGA-BY 3.0/4.0 or GPL 2.0/3.0… each asset carries its own uploader-chosen licence." §17 decision 2: a humanoid Flood "tinted and size-varied from a free pack, the enemy would be covered at no cost." Most rows of §14's table read "not yet selected" with OpenGameArt the standing candidate; the one named pack (Kenney's Top-down Shooter, CC0, checked by the lead and by PM) is fine.

- **Why it fails:** tinting and resizing is an adaptation. Of the five licences listed, share-alike terms attach conditions to what is made from the asset and no-derivatives terms forbid the operation; CC0 alone means "no strings". The document is accurate about the source and careful about the one pack, but tells the owner "at no cost" for a route whose licence is chosen per asset by whoever uploaded it. Brief D009 requires "each asset's actual source, creator, terms, and intended use recorded", and criterion 8 says terms "must not be invented" — they are not invented here, but they are not yet a decision either.

- **Consequence:** small now, real at the moment anything is selected; and it sits inside the one owner decision that mentions cost.

- **Category:** missing design detail (criterion 8).

- **Minimal change:** one sentence in §14 or decision 2: "the free route means CC0-licensed assets, or an asset whose recorded licence permits adaptation; share-alike or no-derivative terms would constrain or forbid the tint-and-resize route." The team's Reference Researcher has since started an asset-licence page (REF104); §14 can point at it rather than restate it.

r10 is about nineteen thousand words; the owner page is one. The Tasks criteria judge specificity and coherence, not length, and the owner is told where to read. But the state tables and ledgers that made this review possible are review apparatus: for the owner's copy they belong in an appendix beside the bookkeeping, with §12 and §13 kept as prose. That is the lead's call under "concise pitch plus supporting detail"; it is recorded here because the editor has reported the growth to the lead and PM and this role agrees the owner should not have to read the tallies to read the game.

Superseded reviews: [REV103 r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r2) · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.

| Finding | Raised in | Status |

| --- | --- | --- |

| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13 | REV101, REV102 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |

| PMR002 1, 2, 3, 4 | PM | Met in r10 (2 with REV103-1, -2) |

| **REV103-1** — §12's leftover sentence; two ledger cells | REV103 r1 | **Open** |

| **REV103-2** — collection rule vs both scenes; now also vs the storage battery | REV103 r1 | **Open** |

| REV103-3 — §11 endings | REV103 r1 | **Resolved at r10** |

| REV103-4 — three stale sentences | REV103 r1 | **Resolved at r10** |

| **REV103-5** — licences listed as interchangeable; adaptation route "at no cost" | REV103 r2 (Q41) | **Open** |

- **Task:** REV103. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV103 r2 (this page); r1 moved to the new REV103 archive verbatim.

- **Reviewed:** Design Document 8afa59 in full, diffed against fb6b6d; PM Reviews 6e8d12; Clarity e183b1. §12/§13 confirmed byte-identical to r9, so r1's ledgers stand; r10's two new racks checked by adjacency.

- **Changed decisions:** none by this role.

- **Evidence:** the ledgers in REV103 r1 (archived); the quoted lines. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.

- **Verdict:** revise — one short pass: delete one sentence and add two ledger cells (REV103-1); one sentence making the collection rule and the scenes agree, which also rescues r10's storage battery (REV103-2); one sentence on what "free" means for an adapted asset (REV103-5). Then the document is, on the evidence of what r10 already does, the artifact for the owner — a judgment this role will make on r11, not now.

- **Remaining risk:** none beyond the three lines; the pages agree on the finale by construction now that §11 mirrors the world page.

- **Next handoff:** lead — r11 with REV103-1, -2, -5. I review r11 when it exists and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.