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Superseded revisions of REV103, the independent review of the revised owner-facing design document, retained verbatim. Not current. The current review is on Design Review; if a statement here disagrees with it, the parent page wins. REV102's superseded revisions are on the REV102 archive; REV101's on the REV101 archive. One archive page per review task; started by the critic on 2026-09-06 when REV103 r2 superseded r1; r2 added when r3 superseded it.

Each revision is also in page history: REV103 r2 3ff337 · REV103 r1 285925.

On this page: r2 · r1

REV103 r2 — retained verbatim (superseded by REV103 r3)

REV103 · r2 · 2026-09-06 16:12 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review — review of DES103 r4, the Design Document at revision r10, which was written against PMR002's closing review, World r16 and REV102 r5/r6 — three minutes before REV103 r1 existed — and so resolves two of r1's four items on its own and leaves two. Present-tense, revision-specific, on the same ledgers. REV103 r1 is on the REV103 archive; REV102 r6–r1 on the REV102 archive; REV101 r8–r1 on the REV101 archive; every revision is in page history (REV103 r1 285925 · REV102 r6 538724 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).

What was reviewed

Verdict — revise: one short pass; three sentences and two ledger cells

r10 resolves REV103-3 and every part of REV103-4 without having read them, because the same corrections came from the world designer and PM. What remains is the two items whose text r10 did not touch — one leftover sentence and one rule its own examples disobey, which r10 has now made load-bearing — plus one criterion-8 sentence the reader is right about. Each is a line. The document's rules, scenes and finale otherwise hold under the ledgers; nothing here is a rule change. No verdict is offered on r11 before it exists.

REV103 r1 items against r10

The new rack drawings, checked by adjacency

• PM's vertical-coil arrangement S C B / S C S, link B→C: the battery at (1,3) touches the coil and the lower-right bundle only; the two left bundles touch the coil's housing and each other and never reach the battery. One drip, as stated. Three bundles with no drip is indeed impossible: with the coil vertical, the battery's remaining neighbour is a bundle in every placement.
• The two-battery electrician S C C / I B B, link lower-right B→C: the linked battery touches the coil and the storage battery; the storage battery touches the coil and the insulation; the one bundle touches the coil and the insulation. No leak, as stated. Its purpose fails only for the reason in REV103-2.
• The harvester and arc hauler are unchanged from r9 and still leak-free.

One new item

REV103-5 — §14 offers five licences as one route while decision 2 proposes an adaptation (Clarity Q41, verified)

• Where: §14: OpenGameArt's assets "are offered under one of CC0, CC-BY 3.0/4.0, CC-BY-SA 3.0/4.0, OGA-BY 3.0/4.0 or GPL 2.0/3.0… each asset carries its own uploader-chosen licence." §17 decision 2: a humanoid Flood "tinted and size-varied from a free pack, the enemy would be covered at no cost." Most rows of §14's table read "not yet selected" with OpenGameArt the standing candidate; the one named pack (Kenney's Top-down Shooter, CC0, checked by the lead and by PM) is fine.
• Why it fails: tinting and resizing is an adaptation. Of the five licences listed, share-alike terms attach conditions to what is made from the asset and no-derivatives terms forbid the operation; CC0 alone means "no strings". The document is accurate about the source and careful about the one pack, but tells the owner "at no cost" for a route whose licence is chosen per asset by whoever uploaded it. Brief D009 requires "each asset's actual source, creator, terms, and intended use recorded", and criterion 8 says terms "must not be invented" — they are not invented here, but they are not yet a decision either.
• Consequence: small now, real at the moment anything is selected; and it sits inside the one owner decision that mentions cost.
• Category: missing design detail (criterion 8).
• Minimal change: one sentence in §14 or decision 2: "the free route means CC0-licensed assets, or an asset whose recorded licence permits adaptation; share-alike or no-derivative terms would constrain or forbid the tint-and-resize route." The team's Reference Researcher has since started an asset-licence page (REF104); §14 can point at it rather than restate it.

A note, not a finding: length

r10 is about nineteen thousand words; the owner page is one. The Tasks criteria judge specificity and coherence, not length, and the owner is told where to read. But the state tables and ledgers that made this review possible are review apparatus: for the owner's copy they belong in an appendix beside the bookkeeping, with §12 and §13 kept as prose. That is the lead's call under "concise pitch plus supporting detail"; it is recorded here because the editor has reported the growth to the lead and PM and this role agrees the owner should not have to read the tallies to read the game.

Finding index — where every finding lives

Superseded reviews: REV103 r1 · REV102 r6 and earlier on the REV102 archive · REV101 r8 and earlier on the REV101 archive.

PM report — REV103 r2

• Task: REV103. Artifact: Design Review, REV103 r2 (this page); r1 moved to the new REV103 archive verbatim.
• Reviewed: Design Document 8afa59 in full, diffed against fb6b6d; PM Reviews 6e8d12; Clarity e183b1. §12/§13 confirmed byte-identical to r9, so r1's ledgers stand; r10's two new racks checked by adjacency.
• Changed decisions: none by this role.
• Evidence: the ledgers in REV103 r1 (archived); the quoted lines. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
• Verdict: revise — one short pass: delete one sentence and add two ledger cells (REV103-1); one sentence making the collection rule and the scenes agree, which also rescues r10's storage battery (REV103-2); one sentence on what "free" means for an adapted asset (REV103-5). Then the document is, on the evidence of what r10 already does, the artifact for the owner — a judgment this role will make on r11, not now.
• Remaining risk: none beyond the three lines; the pages agree on the finale by construction now that §11 mirrors the world page.
• Next handoff: lead — r11 with REV103-1, -2, -5. I review r11 when it exists and post nothing before then except a PM correction. One exact PM request: none.

REV103 r1 — retained verbatim (superseded by REV103 r2)

REV103 · r1 · 2026-09-06 16:05 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review — independent review of DES103 r3, the Design Document at revision r9, the revision written against PMR002 findings 1–4 and criteria 1–11. Present-tense, revision-specific, built on per-beat ledgers this role derived from the document's own rules before trusting its prose, as REV102 r6 committed to. REV102 is closed; its r6–r1 are on the REV102 archive, REV101 r8–r1 on the REV101 archive; every revision is in page history (REV102 r6 538724 · r5 e2db8b · r4 041852 · r3 382607 · r2 82a96b · r1 4dde90 · REV101 r8 11bd4d … r1 7ad187).

What was reviewed

Verdict — revise: one short pass, then it can be judged for the owner

r9 does what PMR002 asked, and the ledgers below show it: the scenes now obey the routing rule, the racks are legal and drawn, every unit of charge is tracked and the tallies close, the arc is drawn twice and played once, the fuel policy is stated as rules, the hours arithmetic is honest, the hauler's cost is true, the ending costs no salvage. PMR002 findings 1 and 2 are met on the page.

What remains is small and specific: one leftover sentence in §12 that contradicts its own correction; one new rule that both scenes disobey; §11's endings, which the world designer has since reconciled on the canonical page and which the document still states in the version that contradicts its own cable model; and three stale sentences PM has already asked to be removed or added. None is a rule change. This role does not pre-approve r10; it names what r9 lacks, and will judge r10 when it exists.

The ledgers — expedition one (§12), rebuilt from the rules

Rules applied: six slots; battery 1, coil 2, bundle 1; a mote adds up to capacity ten; one unit a minute per bundle connected to a battery through touching bundles; modules go into empty slots wherever found; arranging and linking only in a shelter.

Timing note: with one drip from about 5:00, the two stored units are gone by about 7:00 on their own; the prose attributes their loss to the three drips at 7:30. Either the third bundle is added straight after arranging, or the ledger's 7:30 row starts from zero. One cell.

The ledgers — expedition six (§13), rebuilt from the rules

Batteries: coil's (B1) and arc's (B2), capacity ten each; collection "to the linked battery with the most room" as §5 states.

Both scenes now close to the unit. The two disagreements are between the scenes and one new sentence in §5, not within the scenes.

PMR002 findings 1–4 against r9

The findings

REV103-1 — §12 keeps the sentence PMR002 2a found, two sentences after correcting it

• Where: §12, 3:30–7:30. The new text: the platform arrangement C C B / S - S with one drip; then "the player finds a third deposit… drops the bundle into the empty slot. Now the three bundles touch each other in a row, the row touches the battery, and three drips show; the two units are gone in under a minute." Then, unchanged from r8: "Rack now: coil, battery, three bundles, one slot empty, and one drip, because a bundle touches the battery. The player does not yet know what a drip means."
• Why it fails: six of six slots are full and three drips show, by the paragraph's own previous sentence and by the ledger's 7:30 row. The stale sentence asserts a seventh slot and one drip — the exact defect PMR002 2a named, now contradicted by its own fix.
• Also in the ledger: the two pursuers killed at 9:00 drop two motes the ledger does not record; and with one drip from 5:00 the two stored units are gone by about 7:00, before the three-drip moment the prose blames.
• Category: contradiction (leftover text); ledger completeness.
• Minimal change: delete the stale sentence and its duplicate "does not yet know" clause; add "dropped 2; expired 2" at 9:00; either place the third bundle immediately after arranging or start the 7:30 row from zero.

REV103-2 — The new collection rule is disobeyed by both scenes

• Where: §5: "A collected mote goes to the linked battery with the most room." §12 ~4:00: the battery collects two motes before the first arrangement at the platform — it is not yet linked. §13 3:00: the first battery collects two motes; links are drawn at 5:00. §13 6:00–7:30: eleven motes go "eight to the coil's battery, which is now full, and three to the arc's" — the battery with less room fills first.
• Why it fails: the sentence was added in r9 to answer PMR002 2 and it is contradicted by both scenes that were rewritten in the same revision. Either unlinked batteries collect (the scenes) or they do not (the rule), and either allocation is by room (the rule) or by the player's choice or by the coil's battery first (the scene).
• Consequence: small in play, but it is a rule about the arc's fuel, which the recommendation rests on; PMR002 asked for the fuel policy as rules and this is the one rule in it the examples break.
• Category: contradiction (rule versus its own examples).
• Minimal change: one sentence, either way. Simplest, matching the scenes: "A collected mote goes to the battery with the most room, linked or not; a full battery takes nothing; a battery the arc is drawing takes nothing until the burst ends" — and make the 6:00 split follow it (about six and five), or state that the player picks the battery when both have room.

REV103-3 — §11's endings contradict the canonical chain and the document's own cable model

• Where: §11 tier three, "Fix it": "the panel is welded to one branch; that branch's beacon flashes at every dispatch for good… and the welded branch's door is open forever while the other's is shut forever." World and Mystery r16 (canonical for the chain, by the two pages' own division of sources) merges the lead's chain and reconciles this: "Fix clamps the signal cable only, so the intake is fixed and power still switches, and the lead's 'welded branch's door open forever, the other's shut forever' is dropped, because under the two-cable rule a clamp on the lever cannot fix the power line."
• Why it fails: §4 makes power and signal two cables switched separately; a clamp on the lever fixes what the lever does. The document's Fix ending has the clamp fix both, which §4 forbids; the world page's version does not. The document also lacks the relay chain's inside steps (drum, lever, clamp, drain valve) that give the three endings their observable cause. The lead offered the chain "for the world designer to correct and own"; the correction now exists and has not flowed back.
• Consequence: the finale — the thing PMR002 3 asked to be complete — is stated two ways on the two pages, and the document's way breaks the document's own rule.
• Category: contradiction (cross-page, and with §4).
• Minimal change: lift World r16's "Reaching the room", "Inside the room" and the endings table into §11 verbatim, as §9 does for tier one; keep Shut's fifteen-minute window and hard-stop docks (r16 already adopts the lead's version of that).

REV103-4 — Three stale sentences PM has already asked about

• Owner page: "An independent critic has reviewed this document and found it consistent, honest about its unknowns, and readable cold" — that was true of r5 and misrepresents the current state; PMR002 5 asks for "reviewed; revisions remain open". Say that.
• §16: "A critic outside the recorded team has posted a market and originality audit; PM has not yet ruled on its standing" — the External Critic is a team member since D015, and the paragraph's substance is now in §17. Remove or date it.
• Appendix A has no battery entry, the one Q39 asked for and PMR002 assigned; the word is used in every section.

Category: housekeeping; criterion 10.

What works in r9, and why

• The scenes are now state sequences, and they obey the rule they quote. §1's table is the first place the document lets a reader check the signature interaction rather than believe it; §8's rewritten failure is a better failure than the old one, because it needs the player to have made a crowd with nowhere to go.
• The ledgers close. Expedition six tallies to the unit through two discharges, an overflow of thirteen, and a burst that returns nothing because its targets have shed — the fuel policy demonstrated, not asserted. That is what PMR002 2 and REV102-13 asked for.
• The arc costs what the link rule says it costs: six slots and no cargo for the harvester, or three bundles and a slow burst for the arc hauler; both drawn, both leak-free by adjacency I checked.
• The tier-three chain uses only what the player already knows — the junction valve's lesson, one pool further — and the world page's relay chain gives each ending an observable cause in the same vocabulary. Once §11 lifts it, criterion 5 holds at the finale as it does at tier one.
• The market text now says what the measures are, and the length is two figures with their assumptions labelled.

Recorded for later empirical validation — not defects

§16's list, unchanged; the arc's actual duration with pickups (§6 states the nominal); the press-rate bound.

Finding index — where every finding lives

Superseded reviews: REV102 r6 · r5 · r4 · r3 · r2 · r1 · REV101 r8 and earlier on the REV101 archive.

PM report — REV103 r1

• Task: REV103. Artifact: Design Review, REV103 r1 (this page); REV102 r6 moved to the REV102 archive verbatim.
• Reviewed: Design Document fb6b6d in full; World and Mystery 812fd6; PMR002 closing and Tasks ab97dc. Both expeditions re-tallied slot by slot and unit by unit from §5's rules; every drawn rack's adjacency checked; each §1 state-table row checked against clause 3 and the precedence.
• Changed decisions: none by this role.
• Evidence: the two ledger tables above; the quoted sentences. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
• Verdict: revise — one short pass (REV103-1 to -4: one deletion, one sentence, one lift from the world page, three housekeeping lines). r9 meets PMR002 1, 2 and 4 on the page; 3 is met on the world page and awaits the lift. No verdict is offered on r10 before it exists.
• Remaining risk: the two pages diverging again on the finale if §11 is rewritten rather than lifted; the ownership rule in r3/r12 covers it.
• Next handoff: lead — r10 with REV103-1 to -4, lifting World r16's chain and endings verbatim; PM — the full review PMR002 says later revisions require. I review r10 when it exists. One exact PM request: none; note that REV103 is unblocked by r9 and this is its first present-tense review.