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REV104 r4: verification of Campaign r3 (6e4b59) and contract r4 (29f5b0); REV104-6/-8/-9/-10 and the contract notes closed at these revisions; -11 open; -12 now inside the contract (%A73 vs %A79); -13 half closed; -14 opened (bargeman's lure vs the drain rate); r3 moved to Archive/REV104
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# Hold the Flood — Design Review
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**REV104 · r3 · 2026-09-06 19:20 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — review of the exact expanded package Tasks (b72189) and PMR006 name: **Campaign DES104 r2 at b92234, the shared rule contract r3 at 59f895, World and Mystery r22 at da3639, Districts r4 at c58832 and Colony r2 at 12694e**, with the Collector r4 (75c09e), the Head-works r4 (706ce6), Combat r4 (91a866), Enemies r5 (9a72af), Inventory and Charge r2 (9b0547), Equipment r2 (ae4543) and the Coil page (0696cf) read where the package cites them. **A correction first:** REV104 r2 (908e01) reviewed the Campaign at 9d3590; b92234 had superseded it thirteen minutes before r2 was saved. r2's ledgers were of r1's six- and nine-cell racks and are superseded here; every r2 finding is re-checked below against the revision that now exists, and its verdict is not inherited. REV104 r2 and r1 are on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV104 r2 908e01 · r1 80a882 · REV103 r5 205bfb · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
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**REV104 · r4 · 2026-09-06 19:30 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — verification of **Campaign DES104 r3 at 6e4b59 and the shared rule contract r4 at 29f5b0**, which the lead published at 19:18 and 19:17 UTC, two minutes after REV104 r3 (f7735a) was saved on their predecessors b92234 and 59f895. Both answer REV104 r2 and PMR006's five blockers; neither could have read r3, so r3's three new findings are re-checked here against the text that now exists. World r22 da3639, Districts r4 c58832, Colony r2 12694e, the Head-works r4 706ce6, Combat r4 91a866, Enemies r5 9a72af and Utility Modules 087718 are unchanged since r3 and are cited where the new text depends on them. Every closure below is quoted from the revision that makes it. REV104 r3–r1 are on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV104 r3 f7735a · r2 908e01 · r1 80a882 · REV103 r5 205bfb · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
## What was reviewed
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| **Campaign — DES104 r2** | b92234 | 18:37 | Read in full and diffed against 9d3590. §3's three expeditions re-tallied beat by beat on the eight-cell rack under the contract r3's priority rule |
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| **Power and Attraction r3** | 59f895 | 18:37 | Read in full; diffed against 69024c. REV104-1, -3, -4 and the r2 contract notes checked here |
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| **World and Mystery r22** | da3639 | 18:47 | Diffed against r21 9aab5e; aligns to the contract r3 |
| **Colony r2** | 12694e | 18:48 | Stop timing, persistence and the refuge baseline read; D022–D024 adopted |
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| The Collector r4; the Head-works r4 | 75c09e; 706ce6 | 18:40–18:41 | The Stop reconciliation the contract assigned; the Stop row |
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| Combat r4; Enemies r5 | 91a866; 9a72af | 18:42 | The Heavy wording and the reel claim withdrawn; the coil window as Combat states it |
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| Inventory and Charge r2; Equipment r2; Coil | 9b0547; ae4543; 0696cf | 18:50–18:55 | E1–E8 transfer; the reel's item definition (U6); the two-second ruling countersigned |
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| PMR006; Tasks; Brief; PM Reviews | a28870; b72189; 77e392; da9eb5 | 18:57–19:00 | Five blocking contradictions; D025; REV104's assignment: "Name exact revisions; do not inherit the earlier World-only verdict" |
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| **Campaign — DES104 r3** | 6e4b59 | 19:18 | Diffed against b92234 in full; the three written expeditions' changed beats re-tallied; the three new panel tables and the bargeman's rewritten plan checked against the contract |
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| **Power and Attraction r4** | 29f5b0 | 19:17 | Read in full; diffed against 59f895. The r2 contract notes, REV104-8's range, REV104-11, -12, -13 and PMR006 1–4 checked here |
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| Utility Modules — U3, the portable beacon | 087718 | 17:14 | The drain rate the bargeman's plan now leans on |
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| World r22; Districts r4; Colony r2; Head-works r4; Combat r4; Enemies r5 | da3639; c58832; 12694e; 706ce6; 91a866; 9a72af | unchanged | Cited as at r3 |
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| Tasks; PM Reviews; Brief | b72189; da9eb5; 77e392 | unchanged | REV104's row still names b92234 and 59f895; this revision names their successors |
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## Verdict — **revise: the same ledger, three rule interfaces, two tables, two sentences**
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## Verdict — **revise: two rule interfaces in the contract, one plan, one row, three cells**
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The package is what PMR006 calls it, the first coherent skeleton, and it is coherent in the places this role tested first: the contract r3 states the rules in one place and now carries D023, D024 and REV104-1, -3 and -4 as rules; the three deep districts are redrawn on eight cells with the priority rule and **all three ledgers close arithmetically**, which closes REV104-7; the Lock Flight's refuge consequence has a replacement (the service assembly); the Tidal Barrier's floaters now walk to the lit beacon (REV104-10a closed) and its header count is fixed; the owner page's four beats each point at a designed page. Two districts pass the pre-registered six on paper.
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The lead's two revisions close most of what r2 asked, and close it with the method this role uses: the Tidal Barrier's harvest is now collected where it falls, inside the stun, and the ledger's fade column is right (REV104-6 closed); pursuit range has a value and a landmark per district, every first battery is earned at a crowd's edge and priced in hits, and collection is walking over a mote where it fell (REV104-8 closed, one residual clause on the Floater); each new district tables its panel — position, powered branch, intake, flashing beacon — and the tram's lamp is a lure that never flashes (REV104-9 closed in form, two cells wrong); both precedence sentences are corrected (REV104-10 closed); lines conduct when dry and loose cargo does not, the leak rate and the pickup rule are in the contract (the r2 notes closed); the owner page and §10 read Stop, Keep or Leave (PMR006 5 closed); the contract carries PMR006 1–4 as rules, with Combat's table and Colony's mirror pending. All three ledgers still close on eight cells under the priority rule.
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What still fails, at b92234 and 59f895: the Tidal Barrier's 4:30 harvest is still collected from a minute away (REV104-6, unchanged text); Stop's effect on dispatch is stated three incompatible ways across the contract, the world page and the Head-works, two of which PMR006 accepted in the same report (REV104-12, new); the contract's cable reel is not the item its owner defines, and the Exchange outline rests on the difference (REV104-11, new); the first battery in each written expedition is still filled by a beat outside the pursuit and collection rules (REV104-8); the new panels still do not say which position selects which intake or what flashes (REV104-9); the contract and the Campaign adopted a Heavy wording its author withdrew and PM rejected (REV104-13, new); one notebook sentence (REV104-10b). PMR006's five blockers are not repeated; where this role read the same pages, what it saw is recorded. No whole-campaign acceptance is offered; the verdict agrees with PMR006's "integration changes required" and adds the items above to its list.
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What remains, at 29f5b0 and 6e4b59: the contract's §9 now states in its own words that "Stop is the empty flash everywhere, for good", while its §3 makes a flash need the trunk's time and its own table lists Stop under what changes trunk permission, and World r22 says the brake leaves "no district… permitted" — REV104-12 is now a contradiction inside the contract as well as between accepted pages; the cable reel is still two items under one name (REV104-11, unchanged text); the Campaign's Heavy row and beat still carry the wording the contract itself has now dropped (REV104-13, half closed); the bargeman's rewritten plan holds a crowd with a lure that the contract's own §5 drains in one hundred seconds, against a climb the lockkeeper's beats price at four minutes (REV104-14, new); the Lock Flight's Weir intake is placed at a dock, which the frame makes a hard stop, and the Tram's forecast at 0:00 shows an intake its Off row says does not exist (two cells); the Floater needs one clause for the scene that now depends on it. None is a rule change; two are decisions the contract must make in one sentence each.
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## REV104 r2 items against the package, verified at the revisions that exist
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## REV104 items against 6e4b59 and 29f5b0, quoted
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| Item | At b92234 / 59f895 / da3639 | Status |
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| Item | At 6e4b59 / 29f5b0 | Status |
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| **REV104-1, -3, -4** — contract mirrors | Contract r3 clause 3: "A district dispatches when its drum's contact closes and the trunk is carrying time: the drum makes the moment, the trunk permits it… either alone stops announced surges"; "At a dispatch the chosen intake's beacon flashes, and a surge enters there if the supply provides one. A flash with nothing behind it is the empty flash, a readable state of its own"; clause 2: "The city runs on charge harvested from the Flood: the Collector's wheels take charge from the mass passing through, the head-works' switch-house stores and distributes it along the thick cables". World r22 adopts the contract's wording | **Closed** (-4 provisional under D024, as all three pages say) |
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| **REV104-2** | Contract r3 clause 4: "Charge never leaves a district with the player" | Closed; unchanged |
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| **REV104-5** | World r22 unchanged from r21 on the bank's price; Campaign §3.4 reads dark as the shut regime | Closed |
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| **REV104-6** — the Tidal Barrier's harvest | §3.3, 4:30, unchanged in substance: "From the house's step in insulation the surveyor discharges: the fifty organisms standing in it are stunned; five large motes, twenty-five units; the battery, emptied by the discharge, takes ten and fifteen are lost as overflow. Battery ten again"; 13:30: "a full battery lost at the dock". The crowd still holds "at the flats beacon, on the mole's landward end"; "the crossing takes a minute"; motes "fade in seconds" (clause 4) | **Open — load-bearing.** Corrected ledger: collected 10, not 20; lost 25 as fade on the flats, 0 at the dock |
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| **REV104-7** — D023 embodied | Contract r3 clauses 4–5 (priority list; eight cells; "There is no rack expansion; the Campaign page's third row and its crane parts are withdrawn in that form"); Campaign §3.1–§3.3 redrawn; §4 "r1's third row unlocked by the crane parts is withdrawn"; §3.1 consequences: the parts "are the material for the colony's reusable support assembly". Ledgers re-tallied below | **Closed at b92234 and 59f895** |
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| **REV104-8** — the first battery | §3.1 3:30, §3.3 3:30 and §3.2 4:30 unchanged: "The ten walkers climb the stairs in pursuit" from a crowd held at the quay; "Ten walkers wade to the house's steps in pursuit" across the minute's crossing; "ten kills, ten motes, collected as they fall" from the climbing tram. Contract r3 now orders pursuit above attraction (R1) but gives the range no value | **Open** |
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| **REV104-9** — the panels | §3.2 unchanged: "Panel found Off. Forecast: first surge at 3:00, intake yard"; Rail lights the lamp; nothing says what flashes. §3.1's bargeman unchanged. Contract r3 adds the tram's lamp to "What is a beacon" as "a moving beacon where a district adds one", which makes the question sharper, not answered: a beacon that can be selected by the signal line has an intake; one that cannot is a lure | **Open** |
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| **REV104-10** — two sentences | (a) §3.3 6:00 now: "those ten walk to the nearest lit beacon they can reach, the flats beacon, and join the crowd there", and 9:00 counts them ("a hundred and forty") — **closed**. (b) §3.1's notebook unchanged: "the panel cannot light it without lighting the road, but the coil can" | (a) closed; (b) **open** |
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| r2 contract notes 1–4 | 1, the leak rate: clause 1 "one unit per minute per wet bundle reachable from its terminals" — **closed**. 2, how a mote is collected: still implicit ("Nothing but the surveyor and a Carrier can take a mote"); Inventory E5's pickup is the mechanic — one clause still. 3, dry conductors: clause 2 "the water, rail or line it stands on" — the rail is now a conductor; that loose dry cargo (the crane parts) does not conduct is still only on the Campaign page. 4, the pointer and the mirrors — **closed** | Two closed, two reduced to a clause each |
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| r2 minor items | §3.3's header count fixed ("three empty cells"); the tide glass deferred; §6's "the critic's five findings… are the world designer's to close" gone; §10.8 staffing gone | Closed |
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## The three expeditions, re-tallied on eight cells under the priority rule
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**3.1 The Lock Flight, lockkeeper.** `C C B I / S S . .`, link B→C, priority: the one battery. The battery at (1,3) touches the coil, the insulation and the empty cell below it; the bundles at (2,1)–(2,2) touch the coil's housing and each other — no leak ✓. 0:00 four empty ✓; 1:30 two bundles, two empty ✓; 3:30 ten kills → 10 ✓; 5:00 discharge: full linked battery ✓, spent, the Head energised for two seconds, the door opens ✓ (one clause wanted: the door shuts when the current ends, and the 7:00 exit is by its crank, which World r22 grants every hatch); 5:30 two parts into the last two cells, full (8 / 8) ✓ — a part at (2,3) now touches the battery, and "dry metal and do not conduct" is what keeps that leak-free, so the clause belongs in the contract (note 3); 8:10 extracted eight cells ✓. **Closes: dropped 10, collected 10, spent 10, lost 0.** Open: REV104-8 (3:30), REV104-9 and -10b.
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**3.2 The Tram Incline, tram crew.** `C C Bc A / I Ba K S`, links Bc→C, Ba→A, priority Bc then Ba. Bc at (1,3) touches the coil, the arc and the kit; Ba at (2,2) touches the insulation, the kit and the coil; no bundle touches either — no leak ✓. Ba→A crosses cells, which E4 now allows ("links may cross any cells") ✓. 3:30 the heavy's mote → 5 / 0 ✓ (first on the list). 4:30 ten kills: coil's battery to ten, arc's takes five → 10 / 5 ✓ — E3 applied correctly, and the page's own note is right that most-room would have given 8 / 7 and no discharge. 5:30 spread ✓ (no lit beacon reachable). 6:00 one bundle → full ✓. 9:40 15 lost at the dock ✓. **Closes: dropped 15, collected 15, lost 15 at the dock.** Open: the 4:30 collection (REV104-8), the panel (REV104-9), the Heavy's number (REV104-13).
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**3.3 The Tidal Barrier, tidewatcher.** `C C B K / S S I S`, link B→C. The battery at (1,3) touches the coil, the kit and the insulation below; the bundles touch the coil's housing, each other, the insulation and the kit — no leak ✓. 0:00 three empty ✓; 1:30 three bundles, full ✓; 3:30 → 10 ✓ (REV104-8); **4:30 fails (REV104-6)**; 6:00 the floaters retarget ✓; 9:00 a hundred and forty ✓; 13:30 "a full battery" ✗. **Corrected ledger: dropped 35, collected 10, spent 10, lost 25 (fade, on the flats), 0 at the dock.**
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| **REV104-6** — the Tidal Barrier's harvest | §3.3, 3:30: "The surveyor wades out in insulation, shin-deep, thirty seconds to the crowd's edge at the flats beacon, and works the edge with the cutter inside pursuit range: ten walkers, ten kills, ten motes walked over as they fall; two hits taken." 4:30: "Standing at the crowd's edge in insulation the surveyor discharges: the fifty organisms in the water are stunned for eight seconds; five large motes fall among them, twenty-five units; the surveyor walks over the two nearest during the stun, ten units into the battery the discharge just emptied, and the other three fade where they fell." Ledger: "15, fade"; totals "fifteen lost to fade where they fell and ten at the dock" | **Closed.** Ledger re-tallied: dropped 35, collected 20, spent 10, lost 15 fade + 10 dock ✓. One residual, below |
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| **REV104-7** | unchanged from b92234 | Closed |
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| **REV104-8** — pursuit and collection | Contract r4 §3: "Pursuit range is about ten metres, a channel's width, and each district names a landmark for it. A body outside it does not chase; a crowd does not cross a district to reach the surveyor. The first battery in any written expedition is therefore earned at a crowd's edge, inside that range, and priced in hits"; §4: "collected by walking over them where they fell; nothing is collected from a distance or from a moving step". Campaign §3.1 3:30: "comes back down to the crowd's edge, where the quay's shallows meet the foot of the stairs… two hits taken"; §3.2 3:30/4:30: "steps down to the roadbed… holds the roadbed beside the step… each walked over where it fell before the next body arrives; two hits taken"; §3.3 3:30 as above. Landmarks: "the width of the quay's shallows", "the tram's length", "the length of the house's steps" | **Closed.** One residual on the Floater, below |
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| **REV104-9** — the panels | Three tables (§3.1, §3.2, §3.3): position → powered branch → intake selected → beacon that flashes; §3.2: "The tram's lamp is a lure only… never flashes, never selects an intake and never dispatches. This district has one intake, the yard, whichever branch is powered"; contract r4 §3: "The flash is a signal event and needs no power: a dark beacon still flashes at its dispatch and is dark again after it"; the bargeman's order rewritten (below) | **Closed in form; two cells wrong** (below) |
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| **REV104-10** (b) | §3.1's notebook: "the panel lights it only by lighting the weir road too, while the coil lights it, and the weir beacon with it, for two seconds"; 5:00: "the weir beacon on the same circuit glows steady for those seconds, which moves no crowd because the quay is lit and nearer" | **Closed** |
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| **REV104-11** — the cable reel | Contract r4 §1, unchanged: "the cable reel (a laid conductor between two wet points across dry ground; it carries environmental power only and never charges a battery)"; Equipment U6 unchanged: terminal to terminal, six metres | **Open** |
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| **REV104-12** — Stop and dispatch | Contract r4 §3: a district dispatches "when its drum's contact closes and the trunk is carrying time"; §9's table, trunk permission, what changes it: "the governor's Stop, Keep or Leave"; §9's paragraph: "The drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; supply does not… Stop is the empty flash everywhere, for good." World r22, unchanged: "Gone everywhere: the brake stops the shaft; no district is permitted"; "without permission they make no pulse" | **Open — now inside the contract** (below) |
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| **REV104-13** — the Heavy's wording | Contract r4 §10: "the Heavy's hit count stays a number (PMR005)" — closed there. Campaign §3.2's diff row unchanged: "cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time… (Combat's wording)"; 3:30: "kills it in the seconds the cutter needs" | **Half closed**: the contract; the Campaign's row and beat still to fix |
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| r2 contract notes 2, 3 | §1: "Lines conduct when dry: cables and rails carry current along their length. A dry bed, loose cargo (crane parts, bundles on dry ground) and equipment housings do not"; §4: "collected by walking over them where they fell" | **Closed** |
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| PMR006 5 — "slower" | Owner page: "Keep, and you become the thing upstream that keeps time… Leave, and the machine runs as you found it"; §10.6: "Stop, Keep or Leave" | **Closed at 6e4b59** |
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| PMR006 1–4 | Contract r4 §4: two seconds "confirmed: Equipment countersigned at Coil r2 and Equipment r2; Combat's effect table still carries eight seconds… to be brought to this row"; the Spark "stuns nothing and damages no organism… r3's stun clause is withdrawn"; §6: four kinds of persisting state; §9: "The refuge's circuit is fed with the pumping district's… and dies with it, late in the cascade; the world designer's proposed salvage-fed pump reserve is declined" | Stated as rules; Combat's table and Colony's mirror pending, as the contract says. PM's to close |
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| Minor: "drives its gates" | Contract r4 §9 unchanged: "without the harvest that drives its gates"; Collector r4 §2: "All four are hand-worked… none is powered"; "The return lift, which is powered, and is not the same thing as the gates" | Open (one word) |
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| Minor: §7 "PMR004 3 corrections pending"; §8's reasons | unchanged at 6e4b59 | Open (stale) |
## The findings
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### REV104-6 — The Tidal Barrier's harvest is still collected from a minute away (Campaign b92234 §3.3, 4:30; load-bearing)
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### REV104-12 — The contract now says a thing its own dispatch rule forbids (contract 29f5b0 §3 versus §9; World r22)
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Unchanged from r2, quoted above against the same text. The large motes drop where the stunned stand, at the flats beacon on the mole's landward end; the surveyor is on the signal house's step a minute's crossing away; motes fade in seconds and are collected by pickup. Collected is 0, the battery is empty from 4:30, and the district's lesson — "the discharge buys charge, not passage" — is false in the scene written to show it; the tidewatcher's coil is dead weight and the loadout contrast with the runner collapses. **Category:** contradiction (scene versus clause 4). **Minimal change:** one beat — the surveyor wades in insulation to the crowd's edge on the knee-deep flats, discharges there (two seconds of energised water, two health if uninsulated, none in insulation), collects along the edge during the eight-second stun and returns to the house, with the pursuit and hits it costs stated; or the coil leaves the tidewatcher's rack and the district gets a second loadout that does something else.
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- **Where:** §3: "A district dispatches when its drum's contact closes and the trunk is carrying time… either alone stops announced surges." §9, the table: trunk permission is changed by "the governor's Stop, Keep or Leave". §9, the paragraph: "The drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; supply does not… Stop is the empty flash everywhere, for good." World r22's table, which the contract says "carries the same table with the fiction": trunk permission after Stop, "Gone everywhere: the brake stops the shaft; no district is permitted"; local timing, "without permission they make no pulse". The Head-works r4 §4 has the contract's paragraph; its r3 had World's.
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- **Why it fails:** an empty flash is a permitted dispatch with no supply (§3's own definition). If the brake stops the shaft that keeps time — which is what "Stop", "the brake" and World r22 all say — then after Stop nothing is permitted, nothing flashes anywhere, and every district is in the shut regime (§3's "unannounced trickles that grow and a dark forecast"). If instead Stop ends only the harvest and the shaft keeps turning, then flashes continue and World r22's two rows are wrong, and "the brake on the shaft" is a brake on something other than the time source. The contract states the first in §3 and the table and the second in the paragraph.
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- **Consequence:** the finale's readable state — a city of flashing beacons with nothing behind them, or a city of dark boards and trickles — is the campaign's last image and its most expensive presentation decision, and the Collector r4's Stop reconciliation (accepted in PMR006) was written to the paragraph.
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- **Category:** contradiction (within the contract; between it and World r22).
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- **Minimal change:** one sentence choosing. The reading everything else already supports: "The brake stops the shaft, so no district is permitted: after Stop there are no dispatches and no flashes; the drums turn to no effect and the Flood arrives by each district's sluice as trickles." Then §9's paragraph and the Head-works r4 row lose "Stop is the empty flash everywhere", and the empty flash stays what §3 defines: a permitted dispatch the Collector did not supply. If the lead prefers the other reading, World r22's two rows change and the brake needs another name.
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### REV104-12 — What Stop does to dispatch is stated three ways, on three pages, two of them accepted in PMR006 (contract 59f895 §9; World da3639; the Head-works 706ce6 §4)
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### REV104-11 — The cable reel is still two items under one name (contract 29f5b0 §1; Equipment U6; Campaign §3.4)
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- **Where:** contract r3 clause 3: a district dispatches "when its drum's contact closes and the trunk is carrying time… either alone stops announced surges"; its §9 table lists "the governor's Stop or Keep" under what changes trunk permission, and its Stop paragraph says "The relay drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; supply does not, because the Collector's wheels stop cycling the Flood" — silent on whether permission survives. World r22's table, aligned to the contract: trunk permission after Stop, "Gone everywhere: the brake stops the shaft; no district is permitted"; local timing after Stop, "Drums keep turning on flow, so timing survives Stop; without permission they make no pulse." The Head-works r4 §4, rewritten "to the ratified cascade": "Timing survives — the drums keep turning on flow — but supply does not, so every district's beacon goes on flashing on the cadence with nothing behind it. Stop is the empty flash everywhere, for good."
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- **Why it fails:** under the contract's own clause 3, a flash needs the drum *and* the trunk. If the brake stops the shaft, no district is permitted, no beacon flashes, and every district is in the shut regime (trickles by the sluice, dark boards) — which is what the Head-works r3 said and World r22 says. The Head-works r4 has followed the contract's §9 sentence, which names only timing and supply, into the opposite conclusion: flashes everywhere, forever. The contract's §9 is the cause: it gives Stop's consequence for the harvest and the drums and omits the trunk.
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- **Consequence:** the finale's readable state after the campaign's biggest choice is undefined — the empty flash everywhere and the shut regime everywhere are different games and different assets (a flashing beacon versus a dark one), and the Collector r4's Stop reconciliation, which PMR006 accepts, depends on which.
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- **Category:** contradiction (within the contract's own dispatch rule; between two accepted pages).
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- **Minimal change:** one sentence in the contract's §9: "The brake stops the shaft, so no district is permitted: after Stop there are no dispatches and no flashes anywhere; the drums turn without effect, and the Flood arrives by each district's sluice as the shut regime's trickles." Then the Head-works' Stop row loses "Stop is the empty flash everywhere" and gains the shut regime; the empty flash stays what World r22 and the Collector define it as, a permitted dispatch with no supply.
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Unchanged text at both revisions; as in r3. Contract §1 has "a laid conductor between two wet points across dry ground"; the owner §10 names, Equipment, has U6: "clamp one end to an exposed **power** terminal… at most six metres… a second power terminal", and asks that the two not be "integrated… under one name"; Combat and Enemies have already corrected to U6. Campaign §3.4's dry hall conducts "by the cable reel" and has no wet points. **Minimal change:** clause 1 adopts U6's sentence; §3.4 names the Exchange's terminals in one line.
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### REV104-11 — The contract's cable reel is not the item its owner defines, and the Exchange outline rests on the difference (contract 59f895 clause 1; Equipment U6; Campaign §3.4)
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### REV104-14 — The bargeman's plan holds the crowd with a lure that the contract drains in a hundred seconds (Campaign 6e4b59 §3.1; contract 29f5b0 §5; U3)
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- **Where:** contract r3 clause 1: "the cable reel (a laid conductor between two wet points across dry ground; it carries environmental power only and never charges a battery)". Contract §10 gives the catalogue to "Equipment and its item pages". Equipment's U6, the item page: "clamp one end to an exposed **power** terminal, walk a traversable route of at most six metres, and clamp the other end to a second power terminal… cannot clamp to signal cables, living targets, rack batteries, ordinary props or inaccessible ends"; Equipment's reconciliation table: "do not integrate both under one name". Combat r4 and Enemies r5 have already corrected their reel claim "against Equipment's actual revised definition". Campaign §3.4: "Conduction across the dry hall is by the cable reel."
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- **Why it fails:** two items share one name on the contract and its named owner; the contract adopted the Campaign r1 version PM's PMR005 5 already distinguished from the item ("it is not automatically the older arbitrary wet-point connector"). The Exchange is "a dry hall": under the contract's sentence a reel needs two wet points it does not have; under U6 it needs exposed power terminals, which the outline never places. Whichever is meant, the district's machinery problem is written on the other.
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- **Consequence:** the Exchange, the one district still at outline, cannot be deepened (CAM102) until the tool that carries its conduction is one thing; and R10's reach question, which PMR005 tied to the reel, is answered differently by each.
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- **Category:** contradiction (contract versus its own ownership map).
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- **Minimal change:** clause 1 adopts U6's sentence (terminal to terminal, six metres, no wet-point form), since §10 already makes Equipment the owner; §3.4 then names the Exchange's terminals in one line.
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- **Where:** §3.1, the two loadouts: "the bargeman has already planted the portable beacon, armed and lit, on the Tail's far bank… then the bargeman throws the panel to Weir from the dock. The quay beacon dies, the crowd retargets to… the lure… and crosses to the far bank and holds there; the direct road is clear and the door at the top is live. The price is the beacon and its battery, draining a unit every ten seconds and left on a bank the crowd now stands on, and the second dispatch, which under Weir enters at the weir dock beyond the house, so the bargeman must be out and down before it." Contract §5: the portable beacon "drains a unit every ten seconds while lit"; U3: "a full battery gives at most one hundred lit seconds… At empty it darkens". The lockkeeper's beats, same district: foot of the stairs at 4:00, lock house at 5:00, out at 7:00, quay at 8:10 — the round trip from the Tail to the house and back is about four minutes.
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- **Why it fails:** the lure was armed before the first surge, so it is dark within a hundred seconds of arming — before the bargeman is at the house, and earlier still if it was lit while carried. When it darkens, the crowd on the far bank retargets to the nearest reachable lit beacon: under Weir that is the weir beacon at the top of the flight, past the lock house, and the ten walkers take the direct road while the fifty floaters, which cannot climb, have no reachable beacon and spread along the Tail. The plan names the drain as its price and then plays as if the lure held for the whole trip.
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- **Consequence:** the district's second loadout — the one that "fights nothing" — fails on the contract's own number in the scene meant to show it does something the lockkeeper cannot.
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- **Category:** contradiction (the outline versus §5's rate).
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- **Minimal change:** write the plan to the number. Arm the beacon at the switch, not before; the lure buys about a hundred seconds, which is the climb and not the return; state what the bargeman does when it dies — for instance is inside the house with the door live, while the walkers pass the house on the road to the weir beacon beyond it and the floaters spread in the Tail — and price the way down accordingly; or give the bargeman a second battery for the lure at the cost of a bundle, and say so.
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### REV104-8 — The first battery in each written expedition is filled by a beat the rules do not support (Campaign b92234 §3.1 3:30; §3.2 4:30; §3.3 3:30)
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### REV104-13 (residual) — The Campaign's Heavy row and beat (Campaign 6e4b59 §3.2)
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Unchanged text at b92234, quoted in the table above. The contract r3 now settles the order this finding needed — R1, "pursuit outranks attraction… role targets sit below pursuit and above attraction" — and still gives pursuit range no value; "local and short" cannot reach a crowd held a basin away (3.1) or across a crossing the page itself prices at a minute (3.3), and motes dropped beside a climbing tram are not picked up from its step (3.2). The Collector r4 §4 shows the honest version: "the player works the rim with the cutter while the first mass gathers". **Category:** contradiction (scenes versus clauses 3–4), and one missing number. **Minimal change:** a value or a landmark for pursuit range in clause 3 (Combat's page carries the tuning bound); in 3.1 and 3.3 the surveyor at the crowd's edge for the ten kills, priced in hits and time; in 3.2 the ten killed while the tram stands against the heavy and collected before it moves, or a sentence that motes falling on the step are collected.
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The contract r4 restores the number ("the Heavy's hit count stays a number"); the Campaign's diff row still reads "cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time… (Combat's wording)" — a wording Combat r4 and Enemies r5 have withdrawn — and the 3:30 beat reads "kills it in the seconds the cutter needs". The beat's cost ("the stop cost the lead", the crowd "twenty metres behind") needs the number: ten hits, about five seconds. One row, one clause.
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### REV104-9 — The new panels still do not say which position selects which intake, or what flashes (Campaign b92234 §3.1, §3.2)
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### REV104-9 (residual) — Two cells in the new panel tables (Campaign 6e4b59 §3.1, §3.2)
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Unchanged text at b92234. The contract r3 sharpens the question by adding "a moving beacon where a district adds one (the Tram Incline's lamp)" to what is a beacon: if the lamp is on the signal line it flashes and has an intake wherever the tram stands; if not, it is a lure and the yard intake and beacon keep the dispatch — and "Panel found Off. Forecast: first surge at 3:00, intake yard" needs the second reading and a meaning for Off that is not the pumping district's ("no pulse; the surge enters at the sluice"). In §3.1 the ground names no intake and the bargeman's outline needs its order (the surge in at the quay, then the switch to Weir; on Weir at the dispatch the surge enters at the top of the flight, beside the door). **Category:** missing design detail, in the contract's core. **Minimal change:** per new district, the pumping district's three-row table — position → powered branch → intake selected → beacon that flashes — and one sentence making the tram's lamp a lure only.
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- §3.1, Weir, intake selected: "The weir dock, at the far end of the weir road beyond the house." Contract §6: "docks are hard stops for the Flood"; §3.1's own consequences make the weir dock the one the colony may later hold ("refitting the held dock there reverses which end of the flight is hot"). A surge cannot enter at a dock, held or not; the intake is beside the weir beacon.
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- §3.2, the written expedition: "Panel found Off. Forecast: first surge at 3:00, intake yard; second at 8:00, intake yard" — while the table's Off row reads "No dispatch: the shut regime". Read at 0:00 with the panel Off, the board shows no intake; it shows the yard from 1:00, when Rail is thrown. One clause.
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### REV104-13 — The contract and the Campaign adopted a Heavy wording its author has withdrawn and PM rejected (contract 59f895 §10; Campaign b92234 §3.2)
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### REV104-8 (residual) — The Floater in the scene that now depends on it (Campaign 6e4b59 §3.1, 3:30)
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- **Where:** contract §10, R8's disposition: hit counts permitted "and a resistance stated as 'cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time'". Campaign §3.2's diff: "Heavies: an enemy role that blocks rails and doorways, cannot be cleared by the cutter in useful time… (Combat's wording)"; the 3:30 beat: "The surveyor kills it from the step in the seconds the cutter needs" — r1 had "ten hits in five seconds". PMR005 3: "replacing a number with vagueness is rejected… Keep an explicit provisional hit count". Combat r4: "the request to replace the Heavy's hit count with a phrase is withdrawn"; Enemies r5: "PM declines it, and is right that a number is inspectable where a phrase is not".
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- **Why it fails:** the contract records as adopted a wording nobody now proposes, and the scene it governs lost its only number where the number carries the beat — "the stop cost the lead" with the crowd "twenty metres behind" is a timing claim that "the seconds the cutter needs" cannot support or refute.
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- **Category:** contradiction (stale adoption); one missing number.
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- **Minimal change:** restore "ten hits, about five seconds" in the §10 row, the diff table and the beat; Enemies owns the number.
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### REV104-10b — One notebook sentence (Campaign b92234 §3.1)
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"the panel cannot light [the door] without lighting the road, but the coil can": the weir beacon's circuit "energises the Head", so a discharge into the Head lights the weir beacon for its two seconds, as the coil route lights B2 in the pumping district. No crowd moves; the sentence is the §1 error PMR002 caught at REV102. One sentence.
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"the ten walkers come out one and two at a time… the floaters stay in the water, held by the beacon." Under R1 pursuit outranks everything but the stun, and the Floater's own line applies only "while water flows"; a floater within ten metres of a surveyor at the foot of the stairs chases like any body unless a rule keeps it in water. The Floater's definition is "attributed on the Campaign page until transferred" (§7) and there is no Floater page (404); the Campaign's diff says only "carried by flowing water, unable to climb locks or ladders". One clause — "a floater does not leave water" — makes the beat true and is consistent with 8:10's survivors walking back through the Tail. **Also,** §3.3 between 3:30 and 4:30: the surveyor stands at the crowd's edge, inside pursuit range, for a minute after the tenth kill; say where they stand (a step back out of range, then in again at 4:30 — the whole flats are one body, so the discharge does not need the edge).
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- Contract §9 and World r22 say the Collector's wheels stop "without the harvest that drives its gates"; the Collector r4 §2 has the gates hand-worked ("none is powered") and the powered thing a return lift, and reconciles both pages on that distinction. The contract's and the world page's word should be *lift*, or the Collector's reconciliation reads against them.
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- Campaign §7's Collector and Head-works rows say "PMR004 3 corrections pending"; they were delivered at r3/r4 and PMR006 accepts them. §8 still gives PMR004's reasons for the unaccepted duration; Districts r3–r4 §5 replaced that estimate with the baseline path PMR006 records.
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- The owner page ("set it slower, and you pay in every district at once") and §10.6 ("Stop, Keep, or slower") against the Head-works r3–r4 (Slow merged into Keep; Stop / Keep / Leave) — PMR006 5, confirmed at b92234.
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- §3.1, 5:00: with the current gone after two seconds, the lock house door shuts behind the surveyor; the 7:00 exit uses the crank World r22 grants every hatch — one clause, so the scene does not read as a door left open.
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- Contract note 2 and note 3 (above): pickup by contact; loose dry cargo does not conduct.
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## PMR006's five blockers — what this role read, not re-adjudicated
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1. *Coil window.* Inventory r2 and the Coil page now countersign: "Lead ruled two seconds of Coil water power, eight seconds of stun; this revision follows that ruling and withdraws Equipment's eight-second power proposal." Combat r4 §6 still: "8 s — Equipment's number, adopted; this page's earlier 1 s and 1–2 s are both withdrawn" — the source it adopted has moved under it, so the remaining holdout is one table.
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2. *Spark.* Not re-read beyond PMR006's quotation.
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3. *Switched-state persistence.* Colony r2 §1: "Named world commitments follow their authored commit points, not a blanket reset or blanket persistence rule" — softened, not yet the contract's rule.
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4. *Stop at the refuge.* Colony r2: "I proceed on immediate loss of powered colony services with manual basic refuge access, pending World/Campaign/Lead reconciliation", and it rejects World r21's salvage-fed pump reserve, which World r22 has already demoted to "a proposal for Colony". The direction is agreed; the cadence is not. REV104-12 sits underneath this: the refuge's board after Stop shows either dark positions or empty flashes.
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5. *"Slower".* Confirmed at b92234 (minor, above).
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- Contract §9 "the harvest that drives its gates" → *lift* (Collector r4 §2); World r22 the same.
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- Campaign §7's Collector and Head-works rows ("PMR004 3 corrections pending") and §8's reasons for the unaccepted duration are stale against Districts r4 §5 and PMR006.
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- §3.1, 5:00: the door shuts when the two seconds end; the 7:00 exit is by the crank World r22 grants every hatch — one clause, as at r3.
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## Criteria — where the package stands
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## What holds
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Per district, the pre-registered six: the Lock Flight and the Tram Incline pass on paper with REV104-8/-9 as the gaps (and -13 for the Tram); the Tidal Barrier passes five and fails its loadout contrast as written (REV104-6); the Collector r4 and the Head-works r4 pass on paper, with REV104-12 the Head-works' one rule error; the Exchange is an outline whose one tool is two items (REV104-11). The whole: the contract first ✓ (r3, with -11, -12 and -13 to fix inside it); map, travel and returns ✓ (Districts r4 §3–§4); early, middle, late as choices ✓ (Build Paths, adopted in Campaign §4); colony without upkeep ✓ (Colony r2; free return; no reserve tax); mystery thread ✓ (World r22); finale as a local outcome ✓; coverage and assets honest, with PMR006's three/six/eight count under D025; hypotheses labelled ✓; hours: none on the Campaign page, a beat list on Districts r4 (34 expeditions, 8.2 hours of designed content, overhead separate), recorded by PMR006 as a hypothesis — the form this role asked for. Against criteria 1–11: met in structure across the package; 10 (honesty) is where the three new findings live, since each is a contradiction between pages that describe themselves as reconciled; none is met in substance until REV104-6, -8, -9, -11, -12 and -13 close, and none establishes enjoyment, balance or feasibility.
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The lead's r3 is the method applied to its own scenes: each first battery is now a beat with a place, a range and a cost; the harvest is where the motes are; the panels are tabled the way the pumping district's was; the dark-beacon flash is a clean rule that makes the Tram's Rail row consistent with clause 3; the presentation list in §7 counts what each element costs rather than how many names there are, and puts authored art to the owner as the Brief requires. The contract r4's persistence rule (§6) and intensity rule (§4) are the two clauses the specialists most needed and both are stated once. Three ledgers close.
## Recorded for later empirical validation — not defects
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Whether the Stop cascade is legible at one district per expedition; whether the priority list reads as list-keeping (the page's own hypothesis); whether a moving beacon reads at crowd density; the bank's standing cost; eight hours of designed content as a length.
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The ten-metre range, which every scene now leans on (the contract says so); the cascade's cadence; whether a hundred lit seconds is the right price for a lure; the presentation count against the Reference audit.
## Finding index — where every finding lives
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Superseded reviews: [REV104 r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r2) · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.
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Superseded reviews: [REV104 r3](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r3-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r4) · [r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r2) · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.
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| Finding | Raised in | Status at b92234 / 59f895 / da3639 |
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| Finding | Raised in | Status at 6e4b59 / 29f5b0 |
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| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13; REV103-1 to -9 | REV101–REV103 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |
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| REV104-1, -3, -4 — dispatch condition, empty flash, power source | REV104 r1 | **Closed at contract r3 and World r22** (-4 provisional under D024) |
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| REV104-2; REV104-5 | REV104 r1 | Closed |
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| **REV104-6** — the Tidal Barrier's harvest collected from a minute away | REV104 r2 | **Open — load-bearing** (lead: one beat) |
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| REV104-7 — D023 in the contract and the Campaign | REV104 r2 | **Closed at b92234 and 59f895**; ledgers re-tallied and closing |
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| **REV104-8** — the first battery: pursuit and collection | REV104 r2 | **Open** (lead; a range value) |
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| **REV104-9** — the new panels: intake and flash | REV104 r2 | **Open** (lead: two tables; the tram's lamp a lure) |
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| REV104-10 — two precedence sentences | REV104 r2 | (a) **closed at b92234**; (b) **open** |
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| **REV104-11** — the cable reel: two items under one name | REV104 r3 | **Open** (lead: clause 1 adopts U6) |
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| **REV104-12** — Stop's effect on dispatch, three ways | REV104 r3 | **Open** (lead: one sentence in §9; the Head-works' row follows) |
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| **REV104-13** — the Heavy's withdrawn wording adopted | REV104 r3 | **Open** (lead: restore the number) |
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| Contract notes 2, 3; minor items | REV104 r2–r3 | Open (lead; one clause each) |
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## PM report — REV104 r3
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- **Task:** REV104 on the exact package Tasks b72189 names. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV104 r3 (this page); r2 moved to the REV104 archive verbatim. **Correction recorded:** r2 reviewed 9d3590 after b92234 existed; its verdict is superseded, not inherited.
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- **Reviewed:** Campaign b92234 in full, diffed against 9d3590, three ledgers re-tallied on eight cells under E3; Power and Attraction 59f895 in full, diffed against 69024c; World da3639 diffed against 9aab5e; Districts c58832 §9; Colony 12694e; the Collector 75c09e and the Head-works 706ce6 for the Stop reconciliation; Combat 91a866, Enemies 9a72af, Inventory 9b0547, Equipment ae4543 and the Coil page for the Heavy, the reel and the coil window; PMR006 a28870.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. D022–D025 taken as PM's provisional baseline.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences and the three tallies. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Verdict:** revise — REV104-6 (one beat), REV104-12 (one sentence in the contract's §9, then the Head-works' row), REV104-11 (clause 1 adopts the item owner's definition), REV104-8 (a range and three beats), REV104-9 (two tables and one sentence), REV104-13 (a number restored), REV104-10b and the minor items. The five most consequential are -6, -12, -11, -8 and -9. No whole-campaign acceptance is offered; the section critiques of r1 and r2 stand as contributions; PMR006's five blockers stand beside these.
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- **Remaining risk:** REV104-12 — two pages PMR006 accepted disagree on the campaign's final readable state, and the Collector r4's reconciliation was written against the contract's sentence rather than the world page's; fixing the contract first avoids a second round on three pages.
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- **Next handoff:** lead — REV104-6, -8, -9, -10b, -11, -12, -13 and the minor items on the next Campaign and contract revisions; Campaign designer — the Head-works' Stop row after the contract's sentence; Combat — the coil window table; PM — nothing new. I review the resulting revisions when they exist and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
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| REV104-1 to -5 | REV104 r1 | Closed (contract r3–r4; World r22) |
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| REV104-6 — the Tidal Barrier's harvest | REV104 r2 | **Closed at 6e4b59** |
| **REV104-12** — Stop and dispatch | REV104 r3 | **Open — inside the contract** (lead with World: one sentence; then the Head-works' row) |
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| REV104-13 — the Heavy's wording | REV104 r3 | Contract closed at 29f5b0; **Campaign row and beat open** |
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| **REV104-14** — the bargeman's lure against the drain rate | REV104 r4 | **Open** (lead: the plan written to the number) |
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| Minor items | REV104 r3–r4 | Open (one word; two stale passages; one clause) |
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## PM report — REV104 r4
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- **Task:** REV104, continued on the successors of the revisions Tasks b72189 names. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV104 r4 (this page); r3 moved to the REV104 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Campaign 6e4b59 diffed against b92234, the changed beats re-tallied; Power and Attraction 29f5b0 in full, diffed against 59f895; Utility Modules 087718 U3 for the drain rate; World da3639, Collector 75c09e, Head-works 706ce6, Combat 91a866 and Enemies 9a72af as at r3.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences; the Tidal Barrier ledger re-tallied; the bargeman's plan timed against the lockkeeper's beats and §5's rate. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Verdict:** revise — REV104-12 (one sentence deciding what the brake stops, then one row), REV104-11 (clause 1 adopts the owner's item), REV104-14 (the bargeman's plan written to the number), REV104-13's Campaign residual (one row, one number), two table cells, one Floater clause, and the minor items. Closed by the lead's r3/r4: REV104-6, -8, -9, -10, the contract notes and PMR006 5. No whole-campaign acceptance is offered; PMR006's verdict stands with these beside it.
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- **Remaining risk:** REV104-12 is a decision, not a correction, and three accepted pages have written to one side or the other of it; the sooner the contract chooses, the fewer pages rewrite.
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- **Next handoff:** lead — REV104-11, -12, -13 residual, -14, the cells and the Floater clause on the next contract and Campaign revisions; world designer — the §9 sentence once chosen, mirrored; Campaign designer — the Head-works' Stop row after it; PM — nothing new. I review the resulting revisions when they exist and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
