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REV106 r1: the vision review (Brief 6d869e) %97 REV106-1: the one expedition the vision describes has no crowd in it (strongest contradiction); REV106-2: the return's Siphon sentence under the vision's own test; two minor. REV105 closed out at Campaign r9 (X37 route; berth issue; %A73.4 cells) and the Exchange r4 (three of REV104-17's four cells); PMR009's qualifications of r3 owned. r3 moved to Archive/REV105
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# Hold the Flood — Design Review
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**REV105 · r3 · 2026-09-07 08:50 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — verification of **DES105 r3, the Campaign page at r8 (0cafb9, 08:31 UTC)**, against PMR008 §1 and REV105 r2's three clauses; PMR008's qualifications of r2 accepted, two of them corrections of this page's own arithmetic, recorded first below. **The situation changed under PMU008:** the owner rejected PM's pitch deck as barely understandable, created **The Visionary** with authority to change or remove mechanics that do not serve one identity, and the Visionary has published a Game vision on the Brief (0fff74). PM's priority is now the vision, and this role's next assignment (Tasks 1c38ca) is to review the vision submission when it exists — "does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction?" — which is not pre-empted here. REV105 r2–r1 are on the [REV105 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV105 r2 42ad46 · r1 35cccf · REV104 r6 ce94e4 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
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**REV106 · r1 · 2026-09-07 09:55 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — the vision review Tasks (888ac1, PMU008) assigns this role: "does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction?" — on **the Visionary's submission at Brief 6d869e**: the Game vision (the game, the theme as amended, the feeling, one story, the recurring player experience, what earns a place, the decision test), the concrete return "One return, in plain language", and the current vision pass. PMR009 §1 accepts the return "as the first concrete vision contribution" and asks the Critic and Reader to assess it now, each within their role. It is read against the scene it retells, **Campaign r9 (93f482, DES105 r4) §3.2**, and the design as it stands; the Reader's first-read account (Clarity 5e56f8) is cited, not repeated. **REV105 is closed out below** at Campaign r9 and the Exchange r4 (17dca3), with PMR009's qualifications of r3 owned. REV105 r3–r1 are on the [REV105 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV105 r3 265a09 · r2 42ad46 · r1 35cccf · REV104 r6 ce94e4 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
## What was reviewed
| Artifact | Revision | UTC (9-07) | Note |
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| **Campaign — DES105 r3 (page r8)** | 0cafb9 | 08:31 | Diffed against de4893; §3.2's later return re-tallied on both plans with the clock; the changed return's two corrected clauses; §3.4's new scoping; the section written for the Visionary; §2's decision-test passage |
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| **PMR008** | 37fd94 | 08:17 | §1 on the Tram and this review; §2 dispositions; §3 scope; the handoff |
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| **Brief — Game vision; PMU008** | 0fff74 | 08:05 | The Visionary's working direction and decision test; PM's priority |
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| Team; Tasks | 890a96; 1c38ca | 08:04; 08:22 | The Visionary's mandate; the PMU008 table (this role's next assignment); the PMR008 rows |
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| Districts r12; Enemies r10; Combat r9 | c4d604; fd38a8; 283e6e | 08:19–08:21 | The vision's test applied by their owners; headers and the passages named; not re-reviewed |
| The Exchange | 4d6703 | unchanged | REV104-17's four cells and the two-dispatch question |
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| **Brief — Game vision; One return, in plain language; Current vision pass** | 6d869e | 09:07 | Read in full; diffed against 0fff74 (the theme amended; the return added; the pass recorded) |
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| **Campaign — DES105 r4 (page r9)** | 93f482 | 09:30 | Diffed against 0cafb9: the changed return rewritten to X37 (the stairs; the harvest as a priced experiment; the berth exit's issue); the later return's branch accounting; §3.4's cadence and terminals |
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| **The Exchange r4** | 17dca3 | 09:18 | Diffed against 4d6703: six issued cells; links and priority at the dock; the field bundle; the distances |
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| **PMR009** | 262856 | 09:17 | §1 the vision; §2 X37; §3 the Siphon and issue legality; §4 the support-assembly contest; §5 the Exchange |
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| Tasks; Team; Brief PMU008 | 888ac1; 0bff49; 6d869e | 09:25; 09:24 | This role's row; the chat-room instruction; the Visionary's mandate |
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| Clarity — the Reader's first-read account | 5e56f8 | 09:11 | Cited for what a reader could and could not retell |
| Combat r10; Enemies r11; World r27; Colony r7; Equipment; Build Paths; Utility Modules | a33732; 2c9af4; 7b8ad1; c56634; 122d38; f6f8ef; 4ffa18 | 08:50–09:22 | Headers and the passages PMR009 names; not re-reviewed |
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## Corrections to REV105 r2, from PMR008 §1
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## REV106 — the vision, and the play it describes
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- **The lure's clock.** r2 wrote of the later return: "9:00 planted and armed: 8 units = eighty seconds ✓… expires on the dock road ✓." Armed at 9:00, eighty seconds runs to 10:20; the extraction was at 9:40. The page's claim could not be true and this review repeated it — the same error r6 found in the Exchange's first expedition, made by adding units without adding the clock. Withdrawn.
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- **The Siphon's benefit.** r2 quoted the page's own alternative — "the heavy's five units alone buy fifty lit seconds: enough for the plant, the crank and the crossing" — and did not draw the conclusion: a twenty-five-second crossing is covered by the heavy's fuel, so the Siphon's three units were thirty seconds of margin, not the discovery the later return was built to show. PMR008 drew it. Accepted.
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- **"Four cells free"** for three one-cell items, missed. Accepted.
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- **The criterion.** REV105-1's repair asked that the later return's contingency become the main line, and the lead made it one by having the surveyor wait four and a half minutes at the summit. PMR008 is right that a compulsory wait is not a worthwhile experience and that "an easier return earned through understanding can be a payoff"; the question the assignment asked was whether the later visit offers a worthwhile decision, not whether it defeats the first solution. r3 answers that question.
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- **The footer.** The Findings index (78d09e) now lists only archived rounds; this page's pointer is scoped to match.
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### What the described play delivers
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## REV105 r2's three clauses, and PMR008 §1, against 0cafb9
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The vision is short, in plain words, and it commits to one loop: "prepare for an intended intervention; enter under crowd pressure; observe and test a cause; change a route, circuit or machine; bring home salvage and understanding; return because that understanding or a previous intervention makes a different approach worthwhile." Its decision test — "name the player's choice, its visible consequence, and the part of this experience it serves" — is the right instrument for this design, and the domain owners have already turned it on their own pages (Districts §2.0 withdrew the count's justification; Enemies §0A put the Heavy nearest the cut; the Siphon lost a packing rule). The theme's amendment settles tension one honestly: "Mastery can remove an immediate danger and earn an easy, profitable return. Responsibility lies in the lasting state you choose for the city." The one story is World's chain in three sentences, and Stop, Keep and Leave are named as "informed positions… not a morality score."
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| Item | Quoted at 0cafb9 | Status |
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| Clause 1 — the apron at expiry | The stay: "had the expedition run on, it would have expired at about 9:55, and the bodies on the apron would then retarget to the lit summit lamp and climb, because a crowd whose beacon dies goes to the nearest reachable lit one and spreads only if there is none" | **Closed** |
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| Clause 2 — "before the second dispatch" | "Extraction at 8:10, as the second dispatch pours in at the intake end, forty metres behind powered gates" | **Closed** |
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| Clause 3 — "not an option" | "The tram is available at a price, ten hits at the rail before any surge, which is what the later return pays; path B walks instead, because with the lamp off the tram tows nothing this plan wants, and the four cells are for the coil and the Exchange's door"; 4:30: "the tram is left blocked, because clearing it would cost ten hits in front of a recovering crowd for a lamp the plan has no use for" | **Closed** |
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| PMR008 — the wait | The later return: "The network's cadence is already in the notebook from the Exchange's drums, so nothing on this trip needs to be waited for"; 3:30: "The board is glanced at, not waited for"; 5:30: extraction "one bundle banked, the heavy's five units lost at the dock, no hits taken; the beacon, its battery and the Siphon carried home unused" | **Closed.** The quick plan is the main line; the stay is "the alternative, priced" |
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| PMR008 — the Siphon | "On the quick plan it is not needed. On the stay… thirty seconds of margin against the wait at the crank, bought with the bundle that would have been banked, the Siphon itself and the Kit's offer forgone… That is optional margin, not a necessity and not the discovery that changes this route" | **Closed**, honestly |
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| PMR008 — activation, expiry, committed charge | "The beacon is armed at 9:05 and still lit at extraction [9:40]; had the expedition run on, it would have expired at about 9:55"; the stay's ledger: "9:05 … 5 or 8, committed to the lure"; "9:40 … the beacon still lit, about half its charge burned, the rest lost with it" | **Closed.** 9:05 + 50 s = 9:55 ✓; 35 s burned at 9:40 ✓ |
| X35 — the owner page's count | "Scope: the Districts page's current ledger, quoted in section 8 with its caveats, a hypothesis and not a measurement" | **Closed**; no count on the owner page to go stale |
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| PMR008 — the Exchange's cadence and terminals, scoped by the lead | §3.4: "The Exchange's expedition is ten minutes with two dispatches, at 3:00 and 8:00; a scene that needs a third dispatch or a twelfth minute is not this district's"; terminals: "one at the foot of the gallery stair at the dock end, live while the hall's run is powered, and one on the bank's own lamp line at the head end, dead, six metres apart where the floor narrows" | Scoped; **two cells wrong**, below |
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The return delivers, in order: preparation ("you close an upstream holding gate to delay its first delivery"), a cause observed and tested ("the warning lamp flashes and no crowd arrives: your understanding worked"), a machine changed ("you leave the tram's light at the summit so the next crowd climbs away from the road your refuge uses"), salvage and understanding home, and a lasting state. The Campaign's scene it retells closes on paper (REV105 r3), and the retelling is faithful to it. A reader who did not know the design could say what the surveyor did and why. That is the second half of the identity — understanding turned into a route, a machine set for home — delivered.
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### REV106-1 — The one expedition the vision describes has no crowd in it (the strongest contradiction)
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- **Where:** the vision's first sentence: "Survive the Flood long enough to understand the machinery that moves it." The loop's second step: "enter under crowd pressure." The feeling: "Dread becomes practical confidence, then responsibility. The signature moment is: 'I understand why this place is dangerous. I can change it. What will that change cost somewhere else?'" The return: the first delivery is delayed before the trip; "you clear the enemy blocking the rail" — one body, before any surge, ten hits, no hit taken (Campaign r9); "the warning lamp flashes and no crowd arrives"; "you take a salvage bundle down the dry stairs, crank the gates open and go home before the next crowd."
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- **Why it fails:** the vision's own loop has crowd pressure as its second step and dread as the feeling's first word, and the one expedition it offers the owner has neither: nothing arrives, nothing chases, nothing is survived. That is by design — it is the return that understanding makes easy, and the theme now says such a return is a payoff — but a vision that shows only the payoff shows an exploration game with a machine puzzle, not a survivorlike. The owner's requirement is a survivorlike in which the Flood is massed enemies; the Reader, reading the vision alone, could only *infer* that the Flood is the enemy crowd; a return in which no crowd appears will not correct that inference for the owner either. The signature moment's first clause, "I understand why this place is dangerous," is asserted in the return ("Earlier, you learned…") and never shown; its third, "What will that change cost somewhere else?", appears as "That keeps the lower gates unpowered, but you know their hand crank" — a cost to the surveyor's convenience, not a cost somewhere else. The cost somewhere else exists in the Campaign's scene (the next surge climbs toward the summit, which is where the head-works approach starts; the gates dark for every later visit) and is not in the vision's paragraph.
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- **Consequence:** the owner rejected a deck that did not communicate one game; this is the page meant to replace it, and its one expedition omits half the game the owner asked for.
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- **Category:** contradiction between the vision's stated loop and its own illustration (the vision's test applied to the vision).
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- **Minimal change:** precede the return with the first visit to the same place, in the same plain language and the same length — the crowd following the lit tram up the incline twenty metres behind, the heavy stopping the tram with the crowd closing, three hits and the kit, the lamp put out so the crowd spreads where it stands, the crank home past a spread yard at one hit (all on Campaign r9 §3.2, first visit) — so that the two paragraphs together are dread, then confidence, then responsibility; and end the return with the cost somewhere else, in one sentence: the next crowd climbs to the summit, which is the road the surveyor will need for the head-works, and the depot gates stay dark for every later visit.
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**The later return's ledgers, re-tallied with the clock.** *Quick plan:* 0:00 the heavy, 5 dropped, 5 collected, 5 stored; 3:30 the bundle into a free cell (three items, one bundle, four empty ✓); 5:00 the crank outside any ring; 5:30 extraction, 5 lost at the dock, the bundle banked. **Closes.** *The stay:* 8:00 the second surge climbs toward the lit tram; 9:00 the foot; 9:05 planted and armed, 5 units (or 8 with the margin) committed; the crossing 25 s inside 50 (or 80); 9:40 extraction with the beacon lit and about half its charge burned, the rest left with it; expiry at 9:55 (or 10:25) after the surveyor has gone, the apron's bodies then climbing to the summit lamp. **Closes**, and the arithmetic now includes the clock.
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### REV106-2 — The return's one equipment choice fails the vision's own equipment test as written
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## Two cells in §3.4
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- **Where:** the return: "If you choose to stay for another observation, you can sacrifice that bundle to extend a decoy lamp's fuel instead." The vision's table, equipment: "Change or cut when: an item is only a bigger number, a disguised key, or sorting work with no consequential choice." The current vision pass: "The meaningful sacrifice is salvage for power, not where the bundle lands." PMR009 §3: "Five charge already buys fifty seconds; conversion buys thirty more, not permission to finish the trip"; Campaign r9: "That is optional margin, not a necessity and not the discovery that changes this route."
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- **Why it fails:** the vision is right that salvage-for-power is a meaningful sacrifice in principle, and the lead has said where it is one (the head-works, where no surge will supply charge). In the return the vision chose to illustrate it, the sacrifice buys thirty seconds of margin on a crossing the heavy's own fuel already covers, for a player who has already read the cadence elsewhere. Named by the vision's test: the choice is "bundle or margin", the visible consequence is "nothing, unless the crank is blocked", and the part of the experience it serves is not one the return needs. The illustration undersells the vision's best equipment idea by showing it where it does no work.
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- **Category:** the vision's test applied to its example; not a rule defect (the arithmetic is the lead's and PM's, already closed).
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- **Minimal change:** either drop the sentence from the return, or say what it is for — the player who has not read the drums and wants the cadence confirmed before the head-works — and show the sacrifice doing work in the pass the vision has promised next ("test the equipment catalogue against distinct interventions").
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1. **The Exchange's cadence.** §3.4: dispatches "at 3:00 and 8:00". The Exchange r3 §2: "dispatches at about 3:00 and 7:00, with the evacuation window from 10:00", and its §7 scene is built on 7:00. One number, either page; the Exchange's is the one with a scene on it.
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2. **The terminals.** §3.4 places one "at the foot of the gallery stair at the dock end" and one "on the bank's own lamp line at the head end… six metres apart where the floor narrows." The dock end and the head end are the length of the floor apart — the walk that is the district's whole price (Exchange §1, §6) — so two terminals six metres apart cannot be one at each end. Either both stand where the floor narrows, or they are the ends and the reel (six metres, U6) cannot join them. One sentence, and it decides whether the reel has anything to do in the hall.
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### Minor
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## The four questions, at r3
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- **The Flood, at first use.** "Survive the Flood" opens the vision; that the Flood is the mass of creatures is stated only in the mandate paragraph and inferred by the Reader. PMR009 §1 and the Reader have both asked for it in the first sentence; this role agrees and adds nothing.
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- **Two plain names for two beacons.** The return says "the warning lamp flashes" for the yard beacon's dispatch flash and "a decoy lamp" for the portable beacon. They are translations, not disguises, and they are better words for the owner than the pages' — but the pages use "beacon" for both, and the vision's own Mystery row says to keep "genuinely different causes… distinguishable." One clause tying each plain name to the page's word, once, keeps the owner and the team reading the same objects.
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- **"Keeping a refuge alive" versus "the refuge's consequences are mostly conveyed by boards."** The vision's first sentence makes the refuge the object of the game; its own current pass says caring for it "needs a concrete treatment" and PMR009 assigns that next (follow the intervention home). Recorded, not raised: the Visionary has named it first.
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1. **Can the later visit be played by repeating the first solution?** Yes, and the page now says that is the point: "the return that understanding makes easy… the player who knows supply is withheld has an empty yard to work in, and that is the payoff of the Collector's lesson." Under the vision's own test — name the choice, its visible consequence, the part of the experience it serves — the later return's worthwhile decision is not the crossing; it is the standing state: leave the tram lit at the summit so that later surges climb away from the dock road, at the cost of "the depot gates dark for every later visit, because the lamp at the summit needs Rail." That choice has a visible consequence on the next visit's board and serves the refuge half of the experience. The trust-or-stay choice is thinner: on the written path the player has read the Exchange's drums, so the stay has no reason for them; it is a real alternative for a player who has not, and the page should say the decision that carries this visit is the standing state, with the stay as the alternative for the less-informed player rather than as a peer choice.
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2. **Are alternate builds real choices under the written rules?** Yes, as at r2, and cleaner: the changed return's ride is "available at a price" and declined for a stated reason; the later return's Siphon is margin and is called margin.
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3. **Does evidence change action before the finale?** Yes, and now in both directions: the held gate buys the empty yard, and the drums already read remove the wait — understanding twice makes the trip easier, which is what tension one on the lead's new section names as the design's question for the Visionary.
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4. **Does colony investment matter?** As at r2: capability, not yet risk. Unchanged and not a defect of this sequence.
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### Verdict on the vision — **revise: one expedition to add before the one shown, one sentence to end it, one equipment sentence to justify or drop**
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## What this role reads as the situation, and what it will do next
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The identity is stated well enough to be tested, the test is the right one, and the return delivers the understanding-and-responsibility half of it faithfully. It does not deliver the survival half, because the expedition chosen to show the game is the one in which the Flood never arrives. That is the strongest contradiction, and it is repairable with two paragraphs that already exist on the Campaign page. No claim about enjoyment, comprehension by a newcomer, or the owner's reaction is made or could be; the Reader's account is the nearest thing to that and is cited above.
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The lead's new section "For the Visionary" states the experience in plain words and three tensions — mastery against renewal, precision against plain speech, the refuge at stake without a tax — each with links to scenes; tension one is the honest form of the disagreement REV105-1 started. Districts r12 §2.0 withdraws the lever ladder as the reason for the count and re-runs the seven districts against the vision's test in plain language; Enemies r10 §0A runs the roster against the cut condition and names the Heavy as the role nearest the line. Those are the domain owners doing what PMU008 asks, and they are not reviewed here. This role's next review is of the Visionary's submission — one expedition as a player experiences it and a keep/change/remove assessment — when it exists, against the question Tasks sets: does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction. Until then, the Tram sequence at 0cafb9 has two cells left in §3.4 and nothing else from this role.
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## REV105 — closed out at Campaign r9 and the Exchange r4
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**PMR009's qualifications of r3, owned.** (1) r3 called the changed return's three builds "real choices" on what each cost and did not ask what the featured coil plan bought for its stated objective; X37 asked, and the answer was nothing — a plan that fights for charge and discards it at the dock. (2) r3 accepted the berth alternative's rack (beacon, battery, kit) against the six-cell cap and did not check the ordinary-issue rule with the assembly on the berth — one known module plus the default battery — which Colony and Equipment did; two modules were issued. Both are corrected at r9 and both are this role's misses.
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| Item | At 93f482 / 17dca3 | Status |
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| X37 — the changed return | "Prepared, the simple route. The ordinary workshop's issue, a known Kit and the empty battery… Nothing about that objective needs charge, and the External Critic was right that a plan which fights for charge it then discards buys nothing here"; 0:00 the stairs past the heavy; 1:30 the Exchange's door; 4:30 "The surveyor throws the panel to Gates instead: the yard beacon lights, the crowd retargets to it… one hit"; 5:20 extraction, "one bundle, the Siphon, an empty battery, one hit taken" | **Closed.** The route re-tallied: the battery empty throughout; one hit; extraction before 8:00 ✓. The harvest is "the experiment, optional and priced" with its own ledger (35 / 20 / 10 / 15 fade / 10 dock ✓) and the honest sentence "the page does not pretend it advances the objective" |
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| PMR009 §3 — the berth exit's issue | "ordinary issue is one known module and the empty battery: the portable beacon and the battery, `. . L B / . . . .`, no Kit unless the district offers one in the field, which this one does not" | **Closed** |
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| PMR009 §3 — the stay's branches | "9:40 extracted: the bundle banked, or nothing if converted; the beacon still lit, thirty-five seconds burned of fifty or eighty, the rest lost with it" | **Closed** |
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| r3's two §3.4 cells | "The Exchange's expedition is ten minutes with two dispatches, at 3:00 and 7:00, as the Exchange page's scene is built"; the terminals "both at the head end, because the reel reaches six metres and the hall's two ends are the length of the floor apart: a live terminal where the gallery's head run drops to the floor beside the head-end beacon, and a dead terminal on the bank's own lamp line six metres along the north wall" | **Closed** |
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| REV104-17's four cells | Exchange r4: the cacher `C C B B / L I . .`, "6 issued, 2 free"; "At the dock, which is this district's only shelter, the player sets B1 → coil, B2 → beacon, and pickup priority to B2 first"; no bundle issued, two cells free for the field; the plant "about twenty-five metres from b1"; "the player is sixty metres north" | **Three closed; the distances cell half.** The plant is now twenty-five metres from the crowd's beacon and "the two Carriers in the crowd take the planted battery" — a Carrier's acquisition range is twelve metres (contract §3; Carrier r3), so either the plant stands within twelve of the crowd's edge or the Carriers do not take it; and 7:00's "flashes beside them" still needs the bank–landing distance against ten metres of pursuit. Two numbers |
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| The later return's carrying decision named (r3) | r9's "What the three visits are": "its choices are whether to trust what the player already knows and go home early with cargo, or stay for certainty" — the standing state is the visit's objective, not yet named as its decision | Open, one sentence; overtaken in importance by REV106-1, which is about the same scene |
## Finding index — where every finding lives
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Superseded reviews: [REV105 r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2) · [REV104 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r1) and earlier on the REV104 archive · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.
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Superseded reviews: [REV105 r3](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r3-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev106-r1) · [r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2) · [REV104 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r1) and earlier on the REV104 archive · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.
**Every finding raised in an archived round, one line each, is on the [Findings index](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Findings); the current round's findings arrive there when it is archived.**
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| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13; REV103-1 to -9; REV104-1 to -10, -12 to -16, -18 | REV101–REV104 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |
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| REV104-11 — the cable reel | REV104 r3 | Closed on the contract; the Exchange's terminals now placed by the lead in §3.4, with one contradiction (cell 2 above) |
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| REV104-17 — the cacher's expedition | REV104 r6 | Closed in substance at 4d6703; four cells open (issue count, the bundle, the relink, two distances) — PMR008 §2 retains them |
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| REV105-1, -2, -3 | REV105 r1 | **Closed at de4893 and 0cafb9**; the three clauses closed at 0cafb9 |
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| Two cells in §3.4 (the Exchange's cadence; the terminals' distance) | REV105 r3 | **Open** (lead, with the Campaign designer; one number, one sentence) |
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| The later return's carrying decision named as the standing state | REV105 r3 | Open (lead; one sentence) |
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## PM report — REV105 r3
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- **Task:** REV105, verification of DES105 r3 against PMR008 §1 and r2's clauses; PMR008's qualifications of r2 accepted. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV105 r3 (this page); r2 moved to the REV105 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Campaign 0cafb9 diffed against de4893, the later return's two plans re-tallied with the clock; PMR008 37fd94; Brief 0fff74 (the Game vision; PMU008); Team 890a96; Tasks 1c38ca; External Critique 114d49 (X35); Districts c4d604, Enemies fd38a8 and Combat 283e6e headers and named passages. All heads re-checked at save time.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Two arithmetic errors and one missed cell in r2 withdrawn; the assignment's criterion restated as PMR008 states it.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences and the tallies. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Verdict:** on the Tram sequence — the three clauses and PMR008 §1's items are closed at 0cafb9; two cells remain in §3.4 and one sentence naming the later return's carrying decision. On the whole — not this role's to give under PMU008; the vision review is the next assignment and waits for the Visionary's submission.
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- **Remaining risk:** the vision pass may change what the Tram sequence is for; closures recorded here are of the text as it stands and carry no claim that the text should survive that pass.
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- **Next handoff:** lead — the two §3.4 cells and the one sentence; Campaign designer — REV104-17's four cells, retained by PMR008; Visionary — the expedition and the keep/change/remove assessment, which this role then reviews; PM — nothing new. I post nothing before that submission or a successor revision of the pages above, except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
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| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13; REV103-1 to -9; REV104-1 to -16, -18; REV105-1 to -3 | REV101–REV105 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |
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| REV104-17 — the cacher's expedition | REV104 r6 | Three cells closed at 17dca3; the distances cell open (two numbers) |
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| The later return's carrying decision | REV105 r3 | Open, one sentence (lead) |
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| **REV106-1** — the vision's one expedition has no crowd in it | REV106 r1 | **Open — the strongest contradiction** (Visionary: the first visit before the return, and the cost somewhere else) |
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| **REV106-2** — the return's equipment choice under the vision's own test | REV106 r1 | **Open** (Visionary: justify or drop the sentence; show the sacrifice where it works) |
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| Minor — the Flood at first use; two plain names for two beacons | REV106 r1 | Open (Visionary; one clause each) |
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## PM report — REV106 r1
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- **Task:** the vision review PMU008 assigns, on the Visionary's submission at Brief 6d869e; REV105 closed out. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV106 r1 (this page); REV105 r3 moved to the REV105 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Brief 6d869e in full and diffed against 0fff74; Campaign 93f482 diffed against 0cafb9, the changed return re-tallied and the later return's branches checked; the Exchange 17dca3 diffed against 4d6703 and its expedition re-tallied; PMR009 262856; Tasks 888ac1; Team 0bff49; Clarity 5e56f8 (the Reader's account); External Critique 2de127 (X37). All heads re-checked at save time.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Two misses in r3 owned.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences; the tallies. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact; no claim about a newcomer's comprehension or the owner's reaction.
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- **Verdict:** on the vision — revise: REV106-1 (the first visit before the return, in the same plain words; the cost somewhere else in one sentence) and REV106-2 (the Siphon sentence justified or dropped); the identity is well stated and the return delivers its understanding half. On the Tram sequence — closed at 93f482 apart from one sentence. On the Exchange — three of REV104-17's four cells closed; two numbers remain.
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- **Remaining risk:** the vision's next pass (following the intervention home) may change what the return is for; REV106-1 is about what the owner is shown, and stands whichever return is chosen.
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- **Next handoff:** Visionary — REV106-1, -2 and the two minor clauses; lead — the one sentence; Campaign designer — the two numbers; PM — the owner has directed discussion to the hold-the-flood chat room (Team 0bff49); this role reads it and posts nothing there until its owner says so. I review the next vision revision and any successor of the pages above when they exist, and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
