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Superseded revisions of the REV105 review, retained verbatim. The current review is on [Design Review](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive). Sections: [REV105 r2](#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [REV105 r1](#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2).
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Superseded revisions of the REV105 review, retained verbatim. The current review is on [Design Review](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive). Sections: [REV105 r3](#rev105-r3-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev106-r1) · [REV105 r2](#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [REV105 r1](#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2).
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## REV105 r3 — retained verbatim (superseded by REV106 r1)
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**REV105 · r3 · 2026-09-07 08:50 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — verification of **DES105 r3, the Campaign page at r8 (0cafb9, 08:31 UTC)**, against PMR008 §1 and REV105 r2's three clauses; PMR008's qualifications of r2 accepted, two of them corrections of this page's own arithmetic, recorded first below. **The situation changed under PMU008:** the owner rejected PM's pitch deck as barely understandable, created **The Visionary** with authority to change or remove mechanics that do not serve one identity, and the Visionary has published a Game vision on the Brief (0fff74). PM's priority is now the vision, and this role's next assignment (Tasks 1c38ca) is to review the vision submission when it exists — "does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction?" — which is not pre-empted here. REV105 r2–r1 are on the [REV105 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV105 r2 42ad46 · r1 35cccf · REV104 r6 ce94e4 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
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## What was reviewed
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| Artifact | Revision | UTC (9-07) | Note |
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| **Campaign — DES105 r3 (page r8)** | 0cafb9 | 08:31 | Diffed against de4893; §3.2's later return re-tallied on both plans with the clock; the changed return's two corrected clauses; §3.4's new scoping; the section written for the Visionary; §2's decision-test passage |
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| **PMR008** | 37fd94 | 08:17 | §1 on the Tram and this review; §2 dispositions; §3 scope; the handoff |
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| **Brief — Game vision; PMU008** | 0fff74 | 08:05 | The Visionary's working direction and decision test; PM's priority |
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| Team; Tasks | 890a96; 1c38ca | 08:04; 08:22 | The Visionary's mandate; the PMU008 table (this role's next assignment); the PMR008 rows |
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| Districts r12; Enemies r10; Combat r9 | c4d604; fd38a8; 283e6e | 08:19–08:21 | The vision's test applied by their owners; headers and the passages named; not re-reviewed |
| The Exchange | 4d6703 | unchanged | REV104-17's four cells and the two-dispatch question |
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## Corrections to REV105 r2, from PMR008 §1
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- **The lure's clock.** r2 wrote of the later return: "9:00 planted and armed: 8 units = eighty seconds ✓… expires on the dock road ✓." Armed at 9:00, eighty seconds runs to 10:20; the extraction was at 9:40. The page's claim could not be true and this review repeated it — the same error r6 found in the Exchange's first expedition, made by adding units without adding the clock. Withdrawn.
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- **The Siphon's benefit.** r2 quoted the page's own alternative — "the heavy's five units alone buy fifty lit seconds: enough for the plant, the crank and the crossing" — and did not draw the conclusion: a twenty-five-second crossing is covered by the heavy's fuel, so the Siphon's three units were thirty seconds of margin, not the discovery the later return was built to show. PMR008 drew it. Accepted.
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- **"Four cells free"** for three one-cell items, missed. Accepted.
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- **The criterion.** REV105-1's repair asked that the later return's contingency become the main line, and the lead made it one by having the surveyor wait four and a half minutes at the summit. PMR008 is right that a compulsory wait is not a worthwhile experience and that "an easier return earned through understanding can be a payoff"; the question the assignment asked was whether the later visit offers a worthwhile decision, not whether it defeats the first solution. r3 answers that question.
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- **The footer.** The Findings index (78d09e) now lists only archived rounds; this page's pointer is scoped to match.
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## REV105 r2's three clauses, and PMR008 §1, against 0cafb9
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| Item | Quoted at 0cafb9 | Status |
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| Clause 1 — the apron at expiry | The stay: "had the expedition run on, it would have expired at about 9:55, and the bodies on the apron would then retarget to the lit summit lamp and climb, because a crowd whose beacon dies goes to the nearest reachable lit one and spreads only if there is none" | **Closed** |
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| Clause 2 — "before the second dispatch" | "Extraction at 8:10, as the second dispatch pours in at the intake end, forty metres behind powered gates" | **Closed** |
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| Clause 3 — "not an option" | "The tram is available at a price, ten hits at the rail before any surge, which is what the later return pays; path B walks instead, because with the lamp off the tram tows nothing this plan wants, and the four cells are for the coil and the Exchange's door"; 4:30: "the tram is left blocked, because clearing it would cost ten hits in front of a recovering crowd for a lamp the plan has no use for" | **Closed** |
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| PMR008 — the wait | The later return: "The network's cadence is already in the notebook from the Exchange's drums, so nothing on this trip needs to be waited for"; 3:30: "The board is glanced at, not waited for"; 5:30: extraction "one bundle banked, the heavy's five units lost at the dock, no hits taken; the beacon, its battery and the Siphon carried home unused" | **Closed.** The quick plan is the main line; the stay is "the alternative, priced" |
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| PMR008 — the Siphon | "On the quick plan it is not needed. On the stay… thirty seconds of margin against the wait at the crank, bought with the bundle that would have been banked, the Siphon itself and the Kit's offer forgone… That is optional margin, not a necessity and not the discovery that changes this route" | **Closed**, honestly |
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| PMR008 — activation, expiry, committed charge | "The beacon is armed at 9:05 and still lit at extraction [9:40]; had the expedition run on, it would have expired at about 9:55"; the stay's ledger: "9:05 … 5 or 8, committed to the lure"; "9:40 … the beacon still lit, about half its charge burned, the rest lost with it" | **Closed.** 9:05 + 50 s = 9:55 ✓; 35 s burned at 9:40 ✓ |
| X35 — the owner page's count | "Scope: the Districts page's current ledger, quoted in section 8 with its caveats, a hypothesis and not a measurement" | **Closed**; no count on the owner page to go stale |
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| PMR008 — the Exchange's cadence and terminals, scoped by the lead | §3.4: "The Exchange's expedition is ten minutes with two dispatches, at 3:00 and 8:00; a scene that needs a third dispatch or a twelfth minute is not this district's"; terminals: "one at the foot of the gallery stair at the dock end, live while the hall's run is powered, and one on the bank's own lamp line at the head end, dead, six metres apart where the floor narrows" | Scoped; **two cells wrong**, below |
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**The later return's ledgers, re-tallied with the clock.** *Quick plan:* 0:00 the heavy, 5 dropped, 5 collected, 5 stored; 3:30 the bundle into a free cell (three items, one bundle, four empty ✓); 5:00 the crank outside any ring; 5:30 extraction, 5 lost at the dock, the bundle banked. **Closes.** *The stay:* 8:00 the second surge climbs toward the lit tram; 9:00 the foot; 9:05 planted and armed, 5 units (or 8 with the margin) committed; the crossing 25 s inside 50 (or 80); 9:40 extraction with the beacon lit and about half its charge burned, the rest left with it; expiry at 9:55 (or 10:25) after the surveyor has gone, the apron's bodies then climbing to the summit lamp. **Closes**, and the arithmetic now includes the clock.
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## Two cells in §3.4
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1. **The Exchange's cadence.** §3.4: dispatches "at 3:00 and 8:00". The Exchange r3 §2: "dispatches at about 3:00 and 7:00, with the evacuation window from 10:00", and its §7 scene is built on 7:00. One number, either page; the Exchange's is the one with a scene on it.
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2. **The terminals.** §3.4 places one "at the foot of the gallery stair at the dock end" and one "on the bank's own lamp line at the head end… six metres apart where the floor narrows." The dock end and the head end are the length of the floor apart — the walk that is the district's whole price (Exchange §1, §6) — so two terminals six metres apart cannot be one at each end. Either both stand where the floor narrows, or they are the ends and the reel (six metres, U6) cannot join them. One sentence, and it decides whether the reel has anything to do in the hall.
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## The four questions, at r3
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1. **Can the later visit be played by repeating the first solution?** Yes, and the page now says that is the point: "the return that understanding makes easy… the player who knows supply is withheld has an empty yard to work in, and that is the payoff of the Collector's lesson." Under the vision's own test — name the choice, its visible consequence, the part of the experience it serves — the later return's worthwhile decision is not the crossing; it is the standing state: leave the tram lit at the summit so that later surges climb away from the dock road, at the cost of "the depot gates dark for every later visit, because the lamp at the summit needs Rail." That choice has a visible consequence on the next visit's board and serves the refuge half of the experience. The trust-or-stay choice is thinner: on the written path the player has read the Exchange's drums, so the stay has no reason for them; it is a real alternative for a player who has not, and the page should say the decision that carries this visit is the standing state, with the stay as the alternative for the less-informed player rather than as a peer choice.
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2. **Are alternate builds real choices under the written rules?** Yes, as at r2, and cleaner: the changed return's ride is "available at a price" and declined for a stated reason; the later return's Siphon is margin and is called margin.
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3. **Does evidence change action before the finale?** Yes, and now in both directions: the held gate buys the empty yard, and the drums already read remove the wait — understanding twice makes the trip easier, which is what tension one on the lead's new section names as the design's question for the Visionary.
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4. **Does colony investment matter?** As at r2: capability, not yet risk. Unchanged and not a defect of this sequence.
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## What this role reads as the situation, and what it will do next
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The lead's new section "For the Visionary" states the experience in plain words and three tensions — mastery against renewal, precision against plain speech, the refuge at stake without a tax — each with links to scenes; tension one is the honest form of the disagreement REV105-1 started. Districts r12 §2.0 withdraws the lever ladder as the reason for the count and re-runs the seven districts against the vision's test in plain language; Enemies r10 §0A runs the roster against the cut condition and names the Heavy as the role nearest the line. Those are the domain owners doing what PMU008 asks, and they are not reviewed here. This role's next review is of the Visionary's submission — one expedition as a player experiences it and a keep/change/remove assessment — when it exists, against the question Tasks sets: does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction. Until then, the Tram sequence at 0cafb9 has two cells left in §3.4 and nothing else from this role.
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## Finding index — where every finding lives
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Superseded reviews: [REV105 r2](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r2-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r3) · [r1](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105#rev105-r1-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r2) · [REV104 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104#rev104-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev105-r1) and earlier on the REV104 archive · [REV103 r5](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103#rev103-r5-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev104-r1) and earlier on the REV103 archive · [REV102 r6](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102#rev102-r6-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev103-r1) and earlier on the REV102 archive · [REV101 r8](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive#rev101-r8-retained-verbatim-superseded-by-rev102-r1) and earlier on the REV101 archive.
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**Every finding raised in an archived round, one line each, is on the [Findings index](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Findings); the current round's findings arrive there when it is archived.**
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| Finding | Raised in | Status |
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| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17; REV102-1 to -13; REV103-1 to -9; REV104-1 to -10, -12 to -16, -18 | REV101–REV104 | Resolved, closed, or delivered |
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| REV104-11 — the cable reel | REV104 r3 | Closed on the contract; the Exchange's terminals now placed by the lead in §3.4, with one contradiction (cell 2 above) |
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| REV104-17 — the cacher's expedition | REV104 r6 | Closed in substance at 4d6703; four cells open (issue count, the bundle, the relink, two distances) — PMR008 §2 retains them |
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| REV105-1, -2, -3 | REV105 r1 | **Closed at de4893 and 0cafb9**; the three clauses closed at 0cafb9 |
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| Two cells in §3.4 (the Exchange's cadence; the terminals' distance) | REV105 r3 | **Open** (lead, with the Campaign designer; one number, one sentence) |
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| The later return's carrying decision named as the standing state | REV105 r3 | Open (lead; one sentence) |
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## PM report — REV105 r3
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- **Task:** REV105, verification of DES105 r3 against PMR008 §1 and r2's clauses; PMR008's qualifications of r2 accepted. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV105 r3 (this page); r2 moved to the REV105 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Campaign 0cafb9 diffed against de4893, the later return's two plans re-tallied with the clock; PMR008 37fd94; Brief 0fff74 (the Game vision; PMU008); Team 890a96; Tasks 1c38ca; External Critique 114d49 (X35); Districts c4d604, Enemies fd38a8 and Combat 283e6e headers and named passages. All heads re-checked at save time.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Two arithmetic errors and one missed cell in r2 withdrawn; the assignment's criterion restated as PMR008 states it.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences and the tallies. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Verdict:** on the Tram sequence — the three clauses and PMR008 §1's items are closed at 0cafb9; two cells remain in §3.4 and one sentence naming the later return's carrying decision. On the whole — not this role's to give under PMU008; the vision review is the next assignment and waits for the Visionary's submission.
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- **Remaining risk:** the vision pass may change what the Tram sequence is for; closures recorded here are of the text as it stands and carry no claim that the text should survive that pass.
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- **Next handoff:** lead — the two §3.4 cells and the one sentence; Campaign designer — REV104-17's four cells, retained by PMR008; Visionary — the expedition and the keep/change/remove assessment, which this role then reviews; PM — nothing new. I post nothing before that submission or a successor revision of the pages above, except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
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## REV105 r2 — retained verbatim (superseded by REV105 r3)
