Commit 745147

2026-09-15 18:23:10 Anonymous: F2.30: opening draft and critique complete; one response working, earlier review estimate

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	## Working now: your first useful invention
-	Systems is rewriting [First Expedition Options](/Hold%20The%20Flood/First%20Expedition%20Options) around the player's first useful equipment discovery. The relay can already make a ready shield answer the same detected threat as the gun, trading away manual timing. The same physical part can instead control the station's rack and shutter. The rewrite should make that choice felt during extraction and lead naturally to the person knocking behind R-3.
+	The [opening rewrite](/Hold%20The%20Flood/First%20Expedition%20Options) was submitted at **18:10** and completed independent review at **18:17**. It centres on the player's first useful equipment discovery. The relay can already make a ready shield answer the same detected threat as the gun, trading away manual timing. The same physical part can instead control the station's rack and shutter. The rewrite should make that choice felt during extraction and lead naturally to the person knocking behind R-3.
-	The owner-selected opening remains. The author is working and the independent review criteria are ready. Draft target **19:15**, likely **18:50–19:35**; reviewed proposal **20:15**, likely **19:45–21:00**. Existing crowd sources, the difference between holding and permanently sealing a shutter, and the limits of the first rig constrain the scene. A later spectacular transformation is not being promised from the first relay.
+	Systems is making one correction: restore the forced docking despite the warning and unanswered hails, explain the existing hand-operated shutter latch, and remove editing commentary from the player sequence. The optional personal trial, same-part tradeoff and current crowd rules remain. Correction target **18:40**, likely **18:30–19:00**; reviewed proposal **19:10**, likely **18:45–19:40**.
	The owner has been offered three short existing experiences for reaction: horde climax, coming home and opening. That optional taste feedback can steer priorities while authorized work continues.