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F2.30: opening draft and critique complete; one response working, earlier review estimate
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## Ready to read
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**Seventeen proposal or editorial packages have been completed today.** The latest finished at **17:59 Jerusalem time**: [recognising a former patient inside a horde](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hospital%20Story%20Directions), with evidence-based knowledge and an optional conversation with Ivo. Systems is now improving the first expedition around the player's first useful relay invention and its competing use in station machinery. The separate short-rescue choice remains open.
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**Seventeen proposal or editorial packages have been completed today.** The latest finished at **17:59 Jerusalem time**: [recognising a former patient inside a horde](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hospital%20Story%20Directions), with evidence-based knowledge and an optional conversation with Ivo. The opening rewrite was submitted at **18:10** and completed independent review at **18:17**. Systems is making one correction to the arrival context and shutter-latch explanation. The separate short-rescue choice remains open.
Start with [The Game](/Hold%20The%20Flood/The%20Game), continue through [three expeditions into the observation ward](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Expedition%20Proposal), then [Coming Home](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Coming%20Home) and [Discovery in a Changing Station](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Connecting%20The%20Station). For combat, follow [Hordes and Builds](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hordes%20and%20Builds) into [Three Ways to Break a Horde](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Build%20Comparison).
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| Outcome | Owner and current state | Next delivery, Jerusalem time |
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| 80 — Your first useful invention | Systems is working; independent review criteria ready | Draft **19:15**, range **18:50–19:35**; reviewed proposal **20:15**, range **19:45–21:00** |
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| 80 — Your first useful invention | Systems is making one correction; independent critique complete | Correction **18:40**, range **18:30–19:00**; reviewed proposal **19:10**, range **18:45–19:40** |
| 38 — Full-design readiness, still reopened | Outside-edit preservation audit completed; eleven factual/reference corrections published. Supporting readability and broader experience coverage remain | Readiness reassessment with the coherent wiki pass, target **23 September**, range **21–28 September** |
Read the scene in [Hordes and Builds](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hordes%20and%20Builds), with placement in [Moving Scan Expedition](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Moving%20Scan%20Expedition). Its added rail, viewing bay, bridge and receiver make a fourteenth proposed major mechanism; physical fit and fun remain untested. The new Receiver Vault proposal tackles a different risk: a later expedition must deliver growing power and a horde climax before its quiet discovery. It uses the existing vault rooms, enemies and machinery; the new reward opportunity remains a proposal. Earlier rescue and station-completion comparisons are ready for owner reaction.
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## Delivery forecast
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Forecast **F2.29**, updated 15 September. Dates assume work continues today and about five further active working days for the first full pass.
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Forecast **F2.30**, updated 15 September. Dates assume work continues today and about five further active working days for the first full pass.
| Milestone | Target | Plausible range | Completion means |
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| Readable enemy guide | **Completed 16:46** | Earlier than revised 17:15 target | The nine creatures, their horde roles and two setpieces are explained through what the player sees, chooses and overcomes, with actual behaviors retained through review |
| Divergent upgrade choices | **Completed 17:18** | Earlier than revised 18:00 target | The same equipment supports two different earned growth paths, a useful hybrid and understandable choices with costs; one critique and response |
| A person in the crowd | **Completed 17:59** | Earlier than revised 18:50 target | One existing ward encounter becomes a personal discovery, with an optional home response, a simpler record-only alternative and explicit renewal/content costs |
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| Your first useful invention | Today **19:15** draft; **20:15** reviewed | Draft **18:50–19:35**; reviewed **19:45–21:00** | A newcomer can picture a useful first equipment discovery, the same part's station tradeoff, crowd pressure, relief and the next human mystery |
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| Your first useful invention | Draft **delivered 18:10**; **19:10** reviewed | Earlier than 19:15 draft target; reviewed **18:45–19:40** | A newcomer can picture a useful first equipment discovery, the same part's station tradeoff, crowd pressure, relief and the next human mystery |
| Full detailed campaign design | **24 November** | **3 November–22 December** | Proposed progression, content, mysteries, ending paths and production scope developed across the campaign |
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The opening estimate has moderate confidence: the personal relay combination already fits the current rules, while its clarity and emotional payoff still need a rewrite and review. The full-wiki estimate has low confidence. The campaign date has very low confidence and remains a planning allowance pending a fresh content estimate. None promises development, validated fun or the desired number of playable hours; those require a separately authorized phase.
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The opening estimate has moderate confidence: the draft and critique are complete, with two reader-facing corrections and final integration remaining. The full-wiki estimate has low confidence. The campaign date has very low confidence and remains a planning allowance pending a fresh content estimate. None promises development, validated fun or the desired number of playable hours; those require a separately authorized phase.
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The pre-pause targets were 15 September for the readable wiki and 17 November for detailed campaign design. Five paused calendar days and the outside review's core-loop findings moved those dates. F2.29 records the patient scene completed at 17:59, ahead of the revised 18:50 target. The opening rewrite began at 18:01. It addresses a specific remaining weakness: the existing opening explains a part's station use without showing its useful personal combination. The relay setup already fits the current design; the assignment also corrects an unsupported enemy entrance and temporary-shutter wording. The owner can react to the existing horde, home and opening examples while this work continues. The overall dates remain unchanged because broader experience coverage, supporting clarity and consequential creative choices still need work. Earlier estimates and reasons remain in revision history and the forecast checkpoint.
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The pre-pause targets were 15 September for the readable wiki and 17 November for detailed campaign design. Five paused calendar days and the outside review's core-loop findings moved those dates. F2.30 records the opening draft delivered at 18:10, ahead of 19:15, and its independent critique completed at 18:17. The reviewed target moves from 20:15 to 19:10 to allow one correction and final integration. The personal Fork use and station tradeoff are clearer; the response restores the forced arrival despite the stay-away warning and explains the physical shutter latch without internal codes or editing history. The optional owner reaction to horde, home and opening experiences remains unanswered. The overall dates remain unchanged because broader experience coverage, supporting clarity and consequential creative choices still need work. Earlier estimates and reasons remain in revision history and the forecast checkpoint.
