2026-09-15 17:48:34
Anonymous:
Record completed patient-scene critique and active author correction
hold the flood/design plan.md ..
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The [former-patient scene](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hospital%20Story%20Directions) was submitted at **17:38**. Nadi Kelm once stopped a rehabilitation carrier because it moved before she was ready. The proposal connects that memory to one ordinary member of a ward horde, with discovery before or after the fight and an optional exchange with Ivo at home. Both core alternatives remain; a record-only version provides the simpler comparison.
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The author has stopped and the independent reviewer is working. The reviewed proposal target is now **18:50**, likely **18:20–19:35**. The review is checking whether the dialogue feels human, whether each recognition follows evidence the player actually obtained, and whether the local identity rule preserves renewed hordes. Records, presentation and dialogue still carry additional production costs.
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The independent critique is complete and Systems is making one correction: distinguish an actual crossing from merely waking the ward, match dialogue to the evidence obtained, restore the earlier ward-log clue and make Ivo's lines more natural. The correction target is **18:10**, likely **18:00–18:25**; reviewed proposal **18:50**, likely **18:20–19:35**. Records, presentation and dialogue still carry additional production costs.
One focused critique and one response belong to each bounded outcome. The outside-edit preservation audit is complete and its factual follow-ups are published; broader readability and design readiness remain open. States and estimates are on [Progress](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Progress).
