2026-09-15 17:48:33
Anonymous:
Record completed patient-scene critique and active author correction
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## Ready to read
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**Sixteen proposal or editorial packages have been completed today.** The latest finished at **17:18 Jerusalem time**: [two trips with the same equipment and different earned upgrades](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Upgrade%20Choices), including a useful hybrid and a reach-versus-contacts trade. The [former-patient scene](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hospital%20Story%20Directions) was submitted at **17:38** and is under independent review. It connects a person in the crowd to an optional conversation with Ivo. The separate short-rescue choice remains open.
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**Sixteen proposal or editorial packages have been completed today.** The latest finished at **17:18 Jerusalem time**: [two trips with the same equipment and different earned upgrades](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Upgrade%20Choices), including a useful hybrid and a reach-versus-contacts trade. The [former-patient scene](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hospital%20Story%20Directions) was submitted at **17:38** and is being revised after independent review. It connects a person in the crowd to an optional conversation with Ivo. The separate short-rescue choice remains open.
Start with [The Game](/Hold%20The%20Flood/The%20Game), continue through [three expeditions into the observation ward](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Expedition%20Proposal), then [Coming Home](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Coming%20Home) and [Discovery in a Changing Station](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Connecting%20The%20Station). For combat, follow [Hordes and Builds](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hordes%20and%20Builds) into [Three Ways to Break a Horde](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Build%20Comparison).
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| Outcome | Owner and current state | Next delivery, Jerusalem time |
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| 79 — A person in the crowd | Draft submitted at 17:38; author stopped and independent reviewer working | Draft **delivered 17:38**; reviewed proposal **18:50**, range **18:20–19:35** |
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| 79 — A person in the crowd | Systems is working on one correction; independent critique complete | Correction **18:10**, range **18:00–18:25**; reviewed proposal **18:50**, range **18:20–19:35** |
| 38 — Full-design readiness, still reopened | Outside-edit preservation audit completed; eleven factual/reference corrections published. Supporting readability and broader experience coverage remain | Readiness reassessment with the coherent wiki pass, target **23 September**, range **21–28 September** |
Read the scene in [Hordes and Builds](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Hordes%20and%20Builds), with placement in [Moving Scan Expedition](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Moving%20Scan%20Expedition). Its added rail, viewing bay, bridge and receiver make a fourteenth proposed major mechanism; physical fit and fun remain untested. The new Receiver Vault proposal tackles a different risk: a later expedition must deliver growing power and a horde climax before its quiet discovery. It uses the existing vault rooms, enemies and machinery; the new reward opportunity remains a proposal. Earlier rescue and station-completion comparisons are ready for owner reaction.
