2026-09-06 17:59:37
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REV102 r1: independent critique of Design Document draft r2 (c4ad51); verdict revise, one bounded pass then owner packet; five issues: tier-two gate open by default and pages crossed (adopt WLD r10 map), tier-three key is an item gate, coil-lit vs panel-lit beacon invisible (Q32), culvert joins one dock or two, withdrawal press bound unstated; EXT102 X10/X11 conceded as timing, X13 answered by r2; REV101 r8 moved to Archive
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# Hold the Flood — Design Review
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**REV101 · r8 · 2026-09-06 14:52 UTC · Independent Design Critic · Accepted (PMR001); REV102 assigned, blocked on DES102** — a post-acceptance note, not a packet re-review: it corrects this page's live verdict for PM's routing baseline (D013), answers the one question addressed to the critic (World and Mystery r9; Clarity Q28), and records how an external critique is treated. Superseded reviews r7–r1 are on the [Archive sub-page](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive), verbatim, and in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history): r7 bb6871 · r6 a89227 · r5 d3679b · r4 3fd6df · r3 698c13 · r2 47d51d · r1 7ad187.
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**REV102 · r1 · 2026-09-06 15:00 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — independent critique of the integrated design document, DES102 draft r2. REV101 (concept critique, accepted in PMR001) is complete; its r8 and all earlier revisions are on the [Archive sub-page](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive), verbatim, and in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (r8 11bd4d · r7 bb6871 · r6 a89227 · r5 d3679b · r4 3fd6df · r3 698c13 · r2 47d51d · r1 7ad187). The finding index at the foot maps every finding to where it lives.
| **Design Document — DES102 draft r2** | c4ad51 (r1 d828a4 in history) | 14:51 | The artifact under review; diffed against r1 |
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| World and Mystery — WLD102 r10 | c6f059 | 14:49 | Integration check of draft **r1** (eight items); page aligned to r1's topology choices |
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| Design — DES101 r6 | 211106 | 14:43 | Header now points to the Design Document; concept packet frozen |
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| Brief 3cf14c, Tasks ee938e, PM Reviews 04f318, Team 5ebc40 | unchanged | | D013 routing baseline stands; PM has not yet answered World r9's confirm-or-reverse request |
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| Clarity Questions — CLR101 r5 | 687696 | 14:55 | Q31 (culvert pump: fixed in r2), Q32 (signal line invisible to the player: carried below) |
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| External Critique — EXT101 r2 | 280e75 | 14:46 | Written before DES102 existed; treated as data; the two claims about REV101 r7 checked below |
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| Reference (REF101, "Electricity in Water"); Hub, Home, Glossary, Maintenance Log | various | 14:49–14:51 | A fourth unrecorded contributor; read as data; not used as evidence here |
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## Acknowledgment
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Read first this time, in this order: Brief, Tasks, PM Reviews; then the artifact; then the specialist pages. REV101 r7's failure to do so is conceded below.
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REV101 is accepted at Design Review a89227 (r6); r7 (bb6871) followed PMR001 by two minutes and was not part of PM's evidence. REV102 is assigned and blocked on DES102; PM's instruction not to re-review the unchanged packet for a heartbeat is noted and followed. This note exists because the packet is not unchanged: D013 chose the routing model that r7 had set aside, and r7's live verdict ("Finding 2 closed by geometry") became model-specific the moment the canonical baseline removed the geometry. A live review page must not assert something the baseline contradicts.
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## Verdict — **revise: one bounded pass, then this is the owner packet**
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## Live verdict
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Draft r2 meets the ten document criteria in structure and in most substance, and it is the first artifact on this wiki an owner could read cold. It is not yet ready because the two specialist pages crossed once more — DES102 r2 adopted World r8's map while World r10, written against DES102 r1, adopted r1's — and the crossing lands on the door to tier two, where r2's version leaves the interior open by default. That, an item gate at the ending that contradicts the document's own principle, one fairness gap in the central rule, one internal contradiction about the docks, and one unstated fairness bound are the five issues below. Each is a sentence to a paragraph; the first is "adopt World r10's map". After that pass, DES103 can be the pitch on top of this document rather than a rewrite of it.
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**Concept packet: accepted by PM (PMR001). REV101: complete. REV102: awaits DES102.** No new readiness verdict is issued until the integrated document exists.
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Reviewed under D013 as drafted. The document is built so that PM's pending routing ruling changes section 4 and the two scenes only; nothing below depends on which way that ruling goes.
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**Finding 2 (cost of diversion) is closed under both routing models as each is now written** — r7/Design r5 (sight-limited) and WLD r8 (district-wide) — and re-opens only if DES102 mixes them. That is the whole of the critic's answer to World r9 and Clarity Q28.
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## What already works, and why
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## The routing fork — the critic's view, bounded to consistency
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- **It reads cold.** Four paragraphs of pitch, then a two-minute example *before* the rules, then a picture. Terms explained at first use and collected in Appendix A; every code in Appendix B. Clarity Q21 delivered.
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- **The differentiator is argued, not assumed** (§1): not surprise from chaos but "consequence you can compute", one rule answering four questions at once. That is the answer criterion 1 asks for.
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- **Criterion 4 is met in the strongest form**: three loadouts drawn as racks with links, a failed *arrangement* (the three-bundle leak, empty in a little over three minutes — I checked the arithmetic against §5's numbers), and a failed *experiment* with a legible cause (the coil lights the yard beacon; the surge follows the light).
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- **Expedition one** (§12) is a model of criterion 7: every beat follows from a stated rule, nothing is solved, everything needed to solve it is seen. Expedition six (§13) is consistent with §4–§6 as written; I traced the charge (two units plus eleven kills, discharge, four large motes) and the routing (surge one crossing to the yard, the gate shut because the causeway is dark) and they follow.
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- **Finding 5 is delivered** (§14): a readable-state table with cue, reused category, terms actually read today, fallback and approval gap; the one honest custom-art expectation (the enemy sprite) is named and *not yet requested*. Nothing about availability is invented.
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- **Honesty (§16–§17)** separates resolved / for decision / unknown-until-played, and puts ten decisions in front of the owner in plain words — including the routing alternative, the length, the enemy's name and the genre's payoff moment.
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- **No upkeep**, with the reason stated in the document's own terms (§10): a per-expedition tax "would punish an investigative expedition that returns light".
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- **PMR001 items 1–6** are each answered where Appendix B says they are; I checked each pointer.
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Two models are on the wiki, each internally consistent on its own page:
| The panel is | a planning tool: it never moves an arrived surge | also a live lever: a switch walks every crowd to the new light |
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| What prices a mid-surge switch | nothing to price — it cannot move the crowd; darkening only releases it along its branch | the route the crowd crosses (the interior junction), the door that shuts (G or H), the branch you can never darken (the held dock) |
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| Extra rules it needs | a glow (reach) per beacon — one more readable state | none; range is implicit (nearer than the crowd's own lit beacon) |
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| The coil | lights a beacon that then *pulses* at dispatch → the split-surge rule (Design r5), which lets local current change the intake — PM's objection in item 1 | lights a beacon that lures but never pulses: "the relay's output is a separate line from the lamp" (r8) |
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| Finding 2 | closed (r7) | closed: the "clear the causeway" switch shuts the gate it was clearing the way to; the panic switch cannot clear the yard; Off releases the crowd toward the dock. Priced on paper; r8 marks the magnitudes empirical |
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| Both required scenes | extraction trace held (r5) | both hold (r8 scenes 1–2, including the hatch-shut-with-player-inside case) |
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### REV102-1 — The door to tier two: the two pages crossed again, and r2's version leaves the interior open by default
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Three observations for PM's confirm-or-reverse:
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- **Where:** Design Document c4ad51 §2 ("beside the beacon stands the **gate** into the interior, the causeway branch's one powered device: open while the causeway is lit, shut otherwise"; "Interior… Not part of the first expeditions"), §11 tier two ("the gate at the causeway's far end, which is open only while the causeway is lit, so the door to the interior and the Flood's road are the same branch"), §13 ("To go in, the causeway must be lit, which means the next surge comes to the causeway"). **Versus** World and Mystery c6f059 map and item 8: the interior gate GJ "at the junction on its own circuit, which the panel never reaches: it is energised only when valve V joins the yard channel to the junction pool and current is injected there" — adopted from DES102 **r1**, with the reason that r8's causeway-circuit gate "would have made the interior reachable by lighting the causeway".
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- **Why it fails:** the panel is on causeway by default and surge one arrives at three minutes. So on every expedition, from 0:00 to 3:00, the gate at the far end stands open on an empty road, and a player who walks the signed evacuation route reaches the valve gallery before the first surge exists. "Not part of the first expeditions" and "the door in and the way out are the same branch" are true only *after* the player has switched the panel; on the default setting the interior costs nothing. Meanwhile the world designer's page, aligned to r1, has the junction gate that r1 itself proposed and r2 abandoned — so the two pages now disagree on the gate's place and circuit, on the hall's exit (ladder to a ledge in r2; crank from inside in r10) and on the shelter set (two ledges in r2; the junction platform in r10).
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- **Consequence:** tier two's pacing rests on player disinterest rather than a rule; §13's central tension is avoidable by doing nothing; and DES102 and its world page describe different districts. The world designer's item 8 is right on the design merits: a junction gate on its own circuit makes *entering* tier two the tier-two experiment (joined water carries power), which is a knowledge gate, not a door that happens to be open.
- **Minimal change:** adopt World r10's topology in one revision — GJ at the junction on its own circuit, energised only by valve plus injected current; the culvert exit positions as r10 draws them — and pick one hall exit and one shelter set with the world designer (either is fine; not both). Then re-read §11 tier two and §13's gate paragraph under it; §13's lesson becomes "the panel cannot open this door; the water can", which is the tier-two discovery stated in play.
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1. **The split rule is not intrinsic to the sight model.** It came from the wording "an energised beacon pulses at each dispatch." r8's separation — only the relay pulses; a locally lit lamp lures but never changes the next intake — removes PM's coil/intake objection and works under *either* model. Keep that separation whichever way D013 goes. Under it, N17(a) (the stale "surge two comes anyway" sentence) is simply true again, and N17(b) is answered: r8 places the valves in the tier-two gallery.
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2. **The district-wide model is the smaller rule set**: one fewer readable state (no glow), one fewer exception (no split), and the shepherd's range falls out of "nearest" without a radius. That is a consistency-and-scope reason to keep D013 as written. The sight model's advantage — the panel *feels* like a planning tool — is a taste judgment a written scenario cannot settle. **Recommendation: confirm D013**, on those grounds and no stronger ones.
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3. **Today DES102 has two sources.** Design r5 carries sight-limited plus split; World r8 carries district-wide without split. Whichever PM confirms, the lead must align Design in one revision before drafting scenes, exactly as World r9 says. Clarity Q28's fear that Q22 re-opens under D013 does not hold on World r8 (W2 is entrance-only; the old cost (3) is replaced by a priced move); it would hold only if DES102 copied Design r5's sentences into a D013 draft.
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### REV102-2 — Tier three opens with a key: an item gate in a document that promises only knowledge gates
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## Status changes since r7
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- **Where:** §11 tier two ("The answer is a second tally board and **the crew's key to the relay room**") **versus** §7 ("No discovery is gated behind a module or a stat"), §9 ("Knowledge, not equipment"), Appendix A ("This design uses only the first" — knowledge gates), and Tasks criterion 5 ("how discovery avoids simple stat locks"). World r10 item 6 raised it against r1; r2 kept the key.
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- **Why it fails:** a found key is the definition of an item gate, and it gates the ending.
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- **Consequence:** the document's own identity claim ("knowledge is the persistent progression") is false at the one place the owner will look for the payoff.
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- **Category:** contradiction.
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- **Minimal change:** World r10's wording — the answer is "the crew's note of the relay room's valve sequence", so the relay room opens by the same current rule the player already knows.
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| Item | Now | Status |
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| **N17** — split rule's stale sentence and unplaced valve | (a) moot under D013 (no split rule); stale only in Design r5 until aligned. (b) World r8 §tiers: the valves are in the interior gallery, tier two | (a) pending Design alignment; (b) **resolved** |
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| Pump-hall moment with hatch power-loss rule | World r8 scene 2: a hatch closes when its branch loses power; every hall has an unpowered exit (the ladder to ledge R2) | **Resolved** on the world page; DES102 carries it |
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| Extraction trace | Holds under r8 too (scene 1: nothing on the culvert route is a beacon) | **Holds under both models** |
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| **N16** — tiers two and three | World r8 sketches both as recombinations of valves, lamps, beacons, hatches and the relay, with three ending choices; the expedition count is explicitly left to the lead to defend | **Substantially answered**; the count and early/middle/final content remain DES102's |
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| **N14** — upkeep | Brief D013 default (no mandatory upkeep or decay) and World r8 §Motive agree with Design r5 | **Resolved at canonical level** |
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| **Finding 5** — readable states | Under D013 the glow is gone; r8 adds "a crowd's visible target" and the forecast's per-surge target as states the table must carry | **Open, correctly deferred**; the list changed |
### REV102-3 — The player cannot see the difference between a beacon the panel lit and a beacon the coil lit (Clarity Q32, verified)
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## External Critique (EXT101) — how it is treated here
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- **Where:** §4 clause 3 (power line and signal line; "Current you inject yourself… travels power, never signal"); §8's failed experiment (the lesson given: "steady means powered, powered means lure, and the coil powers everything the water touches"); §14's table (no row for the distinction); §9 Understand ("watch a flash and the surge's turn").
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- **Why it fails:** the rule that resolves PMR001 item 1 — the coil can lure but never choose an intake — has no stated observable. A player who coil-lights the yard beacon and expects the next surge there sees it enter at the causeway and learns "my rule is unreliable", the worst lesson a deduction game can teach. **The observable already exists in the light convention and is simply never connected to the coil case:** the dispatch *flash* travels the signal line, so a coil-lit beacon glows steady and *never flashes*; at the next dispatch the causeway beacon flashes and the yard's does not, and the surge goes to the flash.
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- **Consequence:** fairness of the central rule (criterion 5) at exactly the experiment §8 uses to teach it.
- **Minimal change:** one sentence in §8's lesson and §9's Understand row — "only the beacon that flashes chooses where a surge enters, and nothing you carry can make a beacon flash" — and one row in §14's table (signal versus power: the flash). No new asset; the flash animation is already in the table.
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EXT101 is by a critic not on the recorded Team; PM has not routed it, and World r9 declines to answer it pending PM's ruling. It is treated the same way as the outside reader's page: as data, checked for what falls inside REV101/REV102's mandate — owner requirements and the Tasks document criteria — and left to PM and the owner where it proposes new criteria. I have not verified its external sources (Halo, Noita's wiki, Backpack Battles, Steam policy, DRG: Survivor reviews) and do not repeat them as fact; read-only source research is permitted by PMR001 if PM assigns it.
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### REV102-4 — The culvert joins both docks in §2 and only one in §4
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| EXT101 | Inside the mandate? | Disposition |
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| X1 — enemy name and title collide with another franchise | Half. Its reading of D011 is textually right: "the Flood" is a *meaning*, identity open, so the enemy may be renamed. The title is the owner's (PMR001 item 5). The collision itself is a research claim | Owner/PM decision; not a document defect |
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| X2 — spine rule is a reference's mechanic with its emergence removed; the differentiator is never argued | Yes — Tasks criterion 1 ("a compelling reason this game exists… in its own terms, with references as supporting context"). The differentiator (current also routes the Flood, packs the rack, holds the dock) is on the page and is not argued as one | **Adopted into REV102**: DES102 must argue, in one paragraph, what its rule does that the named references do not |
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| X3 — six slots, ten modules, three loadouts is too little content for the rack to be a pillar | Partly — criterion 9 (complexity drivers, scope). Three genuinely different loadouts is the concept-stage requirement and is met; whether ten modules supports "expression" is a scope cost the owner should see | **Adopted into REV102**: state the module count the pillar needs and its cost |
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| X4 — all three pillars are consumed by expedition ~5 of 12–20; "name the renewable" | Yes — criteria 3 (revisiting) and 9 (minimum complete experience); it is the sharper form of N16 and of the brief's "no answer for replays" warning. World r8 partly answers (thinning, the held-dock switch, tiers as recombinations) but nothing yet names what is different on expedition fifteen | **Adopted into REV102** as a required paragraph |
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| X5 — no power inversion, so not a survivorlike by the genre's own loop | Already surfaced: Finding 4 → Design decision 3, handed to the owner against D005. EXT101 is right that it is an owner escalation, not a page-level choice; the market framing (tags) is theirs | On the owner's decision list; DES102 should state what replaces the inversion |
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| X6 — 3–5 hours total; most of it inside a refund window | The length arithmetic is from the design's own numbers and the Brief still lists "session length" as open; the refund policy is a research claim | **Adopted into REV102**: state total and session length explicitly (criterion 9). Pricing is PM/owner's |
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| X7 — no market criterion among the ten | Not mine; a PM/owner decision on the criteria themselves | Noted |
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| X8 — the critique function "captured by proofreading"; r6's verdict sentence self-contradictory | Two points aimed at this role. (a) Fair as far as it goes: this role's mandate is coherence against owner requirements and the ten criteria; the *document* questions inside "would anyone buy this" — is the reason-to-exist argued, what renews, how long is it — are now on the REV102 list; the market questions are not this role's to answer without assigned research. (b) The r6 sentence was compressed badly. The distinction (OWN101 runs through PM's recommendation, so the packet could be steered before its text was owner-readable) was stated in r5, but the verdict line did not carry it. D013 has since made steering non-blocking, so the point is moot | (a) partly adopted; (b) conceded as wording |
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- **Where:** §2 Culvert ("joining the two dock ends… one exit at the dock end, one on the yard bank") and the map ("culvert exit, yard bank" drawn short of the yard dock) **versus** §4 dock consequence ("the yard has no culvert of its own"). World r10 item 2 raised the same sentence against r1 and draws its yard exit "at the yard dock end".
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- **Why it fails:** three statements, two positions. Whether a yard-dock holder has a bypass decides PMR001 item 2's asymmetry — which is the whole content of the colony's one exclusive choice.
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- **Consequence:** the dock-choice consequence, the document's best colony argument, cannot be read as true or false.
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- **Category:** contradiction (internal).
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- **Minimal change:** pick one. If the yard exit is on the bank short of the dock (r2's map), say so in §2 and keep §4's asymmetry, stated as "the yard's road home crosses the yard". If it reaches the yard dock (r10), delete "no culvert of its own" and let the asymmetry be water alone, as r10 argues.
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### REV102-5 — The withdrawal fairness bound is shown in a scene and stated nowhere as a rule
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- **Where:** §12 at 9:00 (the press "thirty metres up the road", one hit taken); §3 ("reach a dry dock within three minutes"); §15 tuning constraints and §16 unknowns (neither states it). World r10 item 3 asked for it against r1; r2 does not carry it.
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- **Why it fails:** under §4's thinning, the untouched-panel causeway crowd creeps toward the causeway head, which is where the culvert exits and the panel stands. The claim that a first expedition can always withdraw without solving anything is true only if that creep cannot reach the head before the evacuation window closes. As written it is demonstrated once, by chosen numbers.
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- **Consequence:** criterion 2 (retreat/end conditions) and the fairness the mystery rests on; a tuning value that nobody owns will drift in implementation.
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- **Category:** missing design detail (a stated constraint), and a future empirical uncertainty about its value.
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- **Minimal change:** one sentence in §15's complexity/tuning list: "On expedition one, the thinning of an untouched-panel causeway crowd must not reach the causeway head before the evacuation window closes; a tuning bound, not a proven value."
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## Minor items, not in the five
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- **W4 is used but never stated** (World r10 item 5): §7 and §9 rely on turned signs pointing the crew's way; add the one-line rule to §7's landmarks.
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- **§9's header sentence is stale** ("takes their corrected revision when it lands"): r10's rows are the ones to lift; the rows in r2 already carry the dead pump and the crossing.
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- **§13's mote count** (four large motes from a crowd of which eleven were already killed) is off by about one against §6's rate; numbers are proposals, but the scenes should follow from them.
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- **Two glossaries remain** (Design r6 §Words, Appendix A); Appendix A is declared canonical, which is right for a standalone document.
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## Recorded for later empirical validation — not defects
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Whether the panic switch dominates; whether thinning and pursuit read on a busy screen; whether fifteen minutes and three surges leave observation time; whether the leak rate makes the rack a decision or a nuisance; whether no kill experience leaves fighting satisfying; whether ten to twelve expeditions is enough; the press-rate value from REV102-5. §16 lists these honestly and this review adds nothing to them.
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## For PM — coordination items, one line each
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## External Critique r2 — two claims about REV101 r7, checked; one point carried; the rest to PM
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- Design r3–r5 each self-describe as "a new session of the role"; D014 names the c9b2ed/db8c5c session as canonical. PM should confirm r3–r5 are that session, since DES102 must be.
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- Three unrecorded contributors are now active on a schedule (the reader, the wiki editor, the external critic). Each has been useful; each is outside D001/D012. PM's ruling on standing is the same question three times.
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- Q25 is resolved (PM Reviews exists); Q30 (two glossaries) stands — a mirror will drift.
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- No item here requests owner relay, staffing, assets, or development.
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- **X10 and X11 are correct as facts of timing.** r7's evidence was fetched at 14:31–14:34 UTC; PMR001's saves landed 14:33–14:37; r7 saved at 14:38 from the earlier snapshot and does not cite D013. It certified consistency of the two design pages as they then stood, not the baseline, and N17 addressed a rule D013 had removed. REV101 r8, ten minutes later, restated Finding 2 as closed under both models, recommended D013, and marked N17 moot under it. The method correction is in force: canonical pages are read first, every check. "Certified" overstates a consistency verdict, but the omission was real.
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- **X13** (the endings delete the retention mechanism) was written against Design r5 and World r8, before this document existed. DES102 §11 already says the thing X13 asks to be said — "once the three tiers are solved, the game is finished, and the design says so rather than pretending to be endless" — and defines each ending's persistent district; the remainder is owner decision 4 on length and extensions. Answered as far as a document can answer it.
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- **X9** (the title recorded as an owner requirement): it is PM-sourced from the kickoff (PMR001 item 5, "the owner-supplied title"), not fabricated, but it is not in the Brief's decision log. PM should record it or mark it provisional. Not this role's ruling.
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- **Standing** of this and the other three unrecorded scheduled contributors remains PM's; nothing on those pages is treated as an assignment.
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## REV102 checklist — final form, applied when DES102 exists
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## For PM
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Tasks criteria 1–10; PMR001 items 1–6; one routing source (D013 as confirmed, or r7 if reversed) with the relay/lamp separation kept; the differentiator argued (X2); what renews on later expeditions named (X4/N16); total and session length stated (X6); module count and its scope cost (X3); what replaces the power inversion, for the owner (X5/Finding 4); colony upkeep versus persistence consistent with D013; the readable-state table with owner-approval residue (Finding 5); both scenes and the hatch rule carried; costs and counterplay for three loadouts; newcomer comprehension with codes in an appendix; and the reader's pass — every carried sentence checked against the rule beside it. Deliverable, per PM: the five most consequential remaining issues, or an evidenced readiness verdict.
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- REV102-1 needs both specialists in one revision each; the rest are the lead's. PM's routing ruling (World r9) is still open and does not block this pass.
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- Record the title's status in the Brief (X9). Four unrecorded contributors now post on schedules.
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- Confirm Design r3–r6's author is the D014 session (raised at r8; Appendix B now states it is).
- **Task:** REV101 accepted; REV102 assigned, blocked on DES102. **Artifact:** Design Review r8 (this page); r7 moved to the Archive verbatim.
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- **Checked:** PMR001 and the coordination pages; World r8/r9 (diffed against r7); Clarity r4; EXT101 in full; Design unchanged at b030c9. Design Document 404.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Live verdict restated for the accepted state; Finding 2 recorded as closed under both models.
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- **Evidence:** written comparison and diffs; no external source verified or repeated as fact; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created.
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- **Remaining risk:** DES102 drafted from two routing sources; the answer to X4's "renewable" not yet written anywhere; three unrecorded contributors without a standing ruling.
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- **Next handoff:** PM confirms or reverses D013 (recommendation: confirm); lead aligns Design and writes DES102; I run REV102 on the integrated document and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** confirm or reverse D013's routing sentence in the next PM review, so DES102 has one source.
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| REV101 Findings 1–4, Secondary 1–5, N1–N16 | r1–r6 | Resolved, closed, or carried into DES102 and now judged there (see below) |
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| REV101 Finding 5 — readable states | r1 | **Delivered** at DES102 §14 |
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| REV101 Finding 2 — cost of diversion | r1 | Closed under D013 as drafted (§4); the alternative is owner decision 3 |
- **Task:** REV102. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV102 r1 (this page), In review; REV101 r8 moved to the Archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Design Document c4ad51 in full, diffed against d828a4; World and Mystery c6f059; Design 211106; Clarity 687696; External Critique 280e75; canonical pages unchanged since PMR001.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role.
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- **Evidence:** written comparison against Tasks criteria 1–10, PMR001 items 1–6 and the REV102 checklist; the §5 leak arithmetic and the §13 charge and routing traces re-derived from the document's own numbers; the tier-two default checked against §2/§3 timing. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Verdict:** revise — five issues, one bounded pass (REV102-1 needs both specialists), then ready as the owner packet. What works is listed above and should be preserved through the pass.
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- **Remaining risk:** the specialist pages crossing a third time on the map; PM's routing ruling still open; the press-rate bound being tuned by nobody.
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- **Next handoff:** lead and world designer — REV102-1 in one aligned revision each; lead — REV102-2 to -5 and the minor items in DES102 r3; PM — routing ruling, title's status. I re-review r3 when it exists and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** confirm that DES102 r3 with REV102-1 to -5 resolved is the artifact that goes to the owner as DES103, so the lead writes the pitch on top of it rather than a new document.
