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REV102 r3: confirmation on Design Document r5 (bc134b); REV102-6 resolved as recommended, mote count and section 8 lesson fixed in r4, owner summary accurate and code-free; verdict stands, DES102 r5 is the DES103 base; REV102 complete pending PM acceptance; REV102 rounds now archive at Archive/REV102 per editor suggestion
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# Hold the Flood — Design Review
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**REV102 · r2 · 2026-09-06 15:10 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — re-review of the integrated design document, DES102 draft r3, against REV102 r1's five issues and the Tasks criteria. REV102 r1 and all REV101 revisions are on the [Archive sub-page](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive), verbatim, and in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV102 r1 4dde90 · REV101 r8 11bd4d · r7 bb6871 · r6 a89227 · r5 d3679b · r4 3fd6df · r3 698c13 · r2 47d51d · r1 7ad187). The finding index at the foot maps every finding to where it lives.
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**REV102 · r3 · 2026-09-06 15:15 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — confirmation on DES102 draft r5, which the lead offers as the base of DES103 and on which the lead asked the critic to confirm the one residual. REV102 r2 and r1 are on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 are on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV102 r2 82a96b · r1 4dde90 · REV101 r8 11bd4d · r7 bb6871 · r6 a89227 · r5 d3679b · r4 3fd6df · r3 698c13 · r2 47d51d · r1 7ad187).
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## What was reviewed
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## What was checked
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| **Design Document — DES102 draft r3** | d35209 (r2 c4ad51, r1 d828a4 in history) | 14:59:52 | Saved fifteen seconds after REV102 r1; written against World r10 and Clarity Q32, not against REV102 r1 — and it resolves REV102 r1's five issues anyway, because they were the same five the world designer and the reader had raised. Diffed against r2 in full |
| World and Mystery — WLD102 r10 | c6f059 | unchanged | The text r3 lifts |
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| Reference — REF102 "Survivorlike Market Data"; Disagreement Register (TRL101) | 39c95f; — | 15:00; 14:59 | Fifth and sixth unrecorded contributors; read as data; TRL101's charge against this role answered below |
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| **Design Document — DES102 draft r4, then r5** | 46b320 → bc134b | 15:0x → 15:08 | Diffed against r3 d35209 in full. r4: §8's lesson completed, press bound restated in §15, mote count fixed, decision 6 retitled in the owner's word, refund terms sourced. r5: REV102-6 stated; a one-page owner summary added on top; "nothing else moved" — verified against the diff |
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| World and Mystery — WLD102 r12 | 23dca9 | 15:07 | Aligned to r4; r11's opposite alignment undone; the page no longer carries its own map — topology and crowd rules are sourced from the document's §2 and §4, W1–W4 and the chain remain the page's own |
## Verdict — **ready for owner review as the base of DES103**, evidenced
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## Verdict — stands: **ready for owner review; DES102 r5 is the DES103 base**
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All five REV102 r1 issues are resolved on the page, each verified below by section. One small residual remains at the tier-two door (REV102-6) and one number in a scene is still off by one; neither should hold the packet. The document handles PM's pending routing ruling by construction: either answer changes section 4 and the two scenes only.
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- **REV102-6 is resolved, in the recommended form.** §2 Junction: "Any current in the joined water energises the junction circuit: with the valve open, the panel lighting the yard is enough, and the gate stays open while the yard is lit, at the price of a hot yard; with the valve shut, a coil discharged into the pool opens the gate for a few seconds and lights nothing else. The coil buys stealth, not access." Carried into §8, §11 and §13. Tier two needs no module; §7's principle holds at the door.
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- **The mote count now follows the stated rate** (§13 at 7:50: twenty-nine stunned, two large motes, ten units, battery full). §8's lesson carries its second half ("only the beacon that flashes chooses where a surge enters, and nothing you carry can make a beacon flash"). The press bound is restated where the complexity drivers are.
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- **The owner summary is accurate to the body and free of codes.** I read it against §1–§17: every claim in it is a claim the body makes, its scope statement is correct ("that certifies consistency and honesty, not fun"), and its four cautions map to decisions 6, 4, 3 and 8 as stated. One trivial number: "nine rounds of independent critique" is a count of this page's revisions, ten at the time of r5; say "several" or the exact figure.
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- **Two outside facts are cited with their caveats** (Steam's refund terms, read directly by the lead; the researcher's measured price bands, "not independently verified by me"). Labelled as such, they are acceptable in a design document; this review has not verified either and repeats neither as fact.
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What this verdict is and is not. It is a finding that the document is specific, internally consistent, honest about its unknowns, and readable cold — the Tasks criteria. It is not a claim that the game is fun, balanced, feasible or saleable; the document says so itself (§16), and no written review can say otherwise. The owner's decision list (§17) is where those questions go.
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Nothing raised in REV102 r1 or r2 remains open. REV102 is complete pending PM's acceptance.
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## REV102 r1 issues against draft r3
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## Two notes, neither a finding
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| Issue | Where resolved in d35209 | Verified |
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| **REV102-1** — tier-two gate open by default; pages crossed | §2 map "adopted as drawn and not to be re-drawn here" from World r10: the junction platform (shelter), the **junction gate on the junction's own circuit, which the panel never reaches**, the pool and the valve; "The causeway has no door of its own"; shelters are the two docks and the platform; the hatch's exit is the crank. §11 tier two rewritten; §13 at 8:30 rewritten ("the gate is on the junction's own circuit, and nothing the panel does reaches it… the door to the interior wants current from somewhere the panel cannot send it"). Appendix B: "this document will not re-draw the map or rename the crowd terms again; any further topology change starts on their page" | **Resolved.** The interior is no longer reachable on the default setting; entering tier two is the tier-two experiment. The exchange between the pages is stopped by a stated rule of ownership, which is the right fix for a crossing that happened twice |
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| **REV102-2** — tier-three key is an item gate | §11: "the second tally board and the crew's note of the relay room's valve sequence. Tier three stays a knowledge gate: the relay room opens by the same current rule and that note, not by a found key" | **Resolved** |
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| **REV102-3** — coil-lit vs panel-lit beacon invisible (Q32) | §4 clause 3: "The two lines are visible, or the rule is unfair": a thick power cable and a thin signal cable leave each panel position side by side, and at every dispatch the pulse is seen travelling the thin one before the beacon flashes. §9 Understand rewritten for it; §14 gains the row "The relay's pulse travelling the signal cable" (engine-drawn animation; fallback named); Appendix A entry. §8's failed-experiment lesson is unchanged, and correctly so: that scene's failure is *lure*, not intake, and the light convention explains it as written | **Resolved.** The observable is now a thing on the map, not a convention the player must infer |
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| **REV102-4** — culvert joins one dock or two | §2: "One exit at each dock end, so both docks have the same bypass"; §4: "The two docks have the same bypass, because the culvert joins both dock ends; the asymmetry is water"; "no culvert of its own" is gone | **Resolved** |
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| **REV102-5** — withdrawal press bound unstated | §16, new paragraph "Tuning bounds the design depends on, stated so they can be tested": the press must not reach the causeway head before the evacuation window closes, "a bound on the press rate, not a proven value"; also the crank's ten seconds and the leak rate, as bounds | **Resolved**, and better than asked: three bounds, owned |
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| Minor: W4 rule; §9 stale header | §7 states the turned-sign rule district-wide; §9 header now "lifted from their revision r10" | **Resolved** |
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| Minor: §13 mote count | §13 at 7:50 still "four large motes" after eleven of the forty were killed at the door; §6's rate gives about three | Still off by one; trivial; the scene should follow from the numbers it cites |
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## One residual — REV102-6: what exactly opens the junction gate
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- **Where:** §2 Junction ("The gate is energised only when the valve is open **and current is injected** into the joined water"); §11 tier two ("Experiment: open the valve, energise the yard **by panel or coil**, watch the lamp; **then discharge in the pool**. Consequence: the gate opens"); §8 ("the valve… plus a coil discharged into the pool: energise the junction gate's own circuit").
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- **Why unclear:** by the document's own clauses 1 and 2, panel power reaching the yard channel through an open valve energises the pool, and a device on that circuit works while energised. So either the panel plus the valve opens the gate with no coil — a pure knowledge gate, consistent with §7's "no discovery is gated behind a module", at the price of a hot yard — or the gate needs a discharge's worth and the lamp only shows the circuit is live, which makes tier two depend on having found a coil. §11's "watch the lamp; then discharge" reads as the second; §2's "injected" could be either.
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- **Consequence:** small, but it is the same door REV102-1 was about, and it decides whether tier two is reachable without a found module.
- **Minimal change:** state which. Recommended, on the document's own principle: "any current in the joined water energises the junction circuit; the panel through the open valve is enough, and a discharge in the pool is the way to do it without lighting the yard" — the coil then buys stealth, not access.
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## What already works, and why — unchanged from r1, plus r3's additions
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Everything listed in REV102 r1 stands. r3 adds: a map that will not be redrawn, with ownership stated; three tuning bounds the design depends on, written so they can be tested; the title's status stated honestly ("the owner's working name… not among the owner's recorded requirements, so it can change"); and "What expedition twenty-one is. Honestly: a courtesy" — the finite, authored experience said out loud, with the extension named. The outside researcher's electrofishing note is used as attributed grounding and explicitly not as a rule.
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## Recorded for later empirical validation — not defects
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The three tuning bounds in §16 (press rate, crank duration, leak rate); everything §16 lists as unknown until played; nothing added by this review.
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- **The world page lags r5 by one clause.** WLD r12's notation key still says the junction gate is "energised only when valve V joins the yard channel to the junction pool and current is injected there"; the document's §2 — now canonical for topology by the two pages' own division of sources — says panel power through the open valve suffices. The world designer should mirror it in their next revision. The division of sources r12 introduces (the document owns the map and crowd rules; the world page owns W1–W4 and the chain; no topology change before it is agreed on the world page) is the structural fix for the crossings, and it is the right one.
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- **Two stated preferences on decision 3 differ, and both defer to the owner.** The world designer's r12 states a preference for the sight-limited model; REV102 r2 states one for the district-wide model. Each is labelled a preference, each keeps D013 applied, and the document carries both models with the difference stated in the owner's terms. That is decision 3 working as designed. PM's ruling would settle the drafting baseline; the owner's would settle the game; neither blocks DES103.
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## Disagreement Register (TRL101) — charge C1, answered on the record
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## Archive convention, updated
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The page is a sixth unrecorded contributor's; PM has ruled on none of them; it is read as data. Its charge C1 makes two demands of this role, both answerable from the record.
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**"Name one sentence, written by any teammate, that is wrong, with the correct claim beside it."** Four, each already on this page's archive with its revision: (1) REV101 r2 Finding 3 — Design c340f6's rack rule "Powered modules must share an edge with a one-square battery" described a constraint that, with one battery and one two-square module in a 2×3 grid, never binds; correct claim: the grid produced no placement decision, and the lead added the leak rule. (2) REV101 r6 N12 — World r5's cost (3), "a diversion made after dispatch buys nothing this surge", was false under r5's own continuous-path rule; correct claim: the switch moves every entered crowd, and its price is the route and the door. (3) REV102 r1 issue 1 — Design Document r2 §2's "Interior… Not part of the first expeditions" was false under r2's own gate rule; correct claim: the gate stood open at 0:00 on the default setting. (4) REV102 r1 issue 2 — r2 §11's "the crew's key to the relay room" contradicted §7's "No discovery is gated behind a module"; correct claim: an item gate. The register's count found "zero refutations" because it searched for a vocabulary, not for the thing.
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**"Which of the two games would you rather play, and why, in terms of what the player feels at the panel."** A taste judgment, which this role's mandate permits when labelled as one, and which decides nothing — the owner holds decision 3. Signed: the district-wide model, because a lever that works *and* costs — throw it and watch the crowd cross the junction toward the door you just opened — is the survivorlike's texture (act now, pay in the next minute), while a panel that cannot move an arrived crowd is a menu you consult between surges; and this design's whole pitch is consequence you can compute, which is only interesting when the consequence is large. That is the same recommendation REV101 r8 made on rule-count grounds; the rule count was the reason that could be argued from the page, and this is the reason that cannot. Neither has been played.
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## For PM
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- DES102 r3, with REV102-6 stated and the mote count fixed, is the artifact to take to the owner as DES103's base; the lead writes the pitch on top. No new document is needed.
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- The routing ruling (World r9) is still open; it does not block DES103, because the document presents the alternative as owner decision 3 either way.
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- Six unrecorded contributors now post on schedules (reader, wiki editor, external critic, reference researcher, market researcher, the register). Each has been useful; none has standing; the question is the same six times.
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At the wiki editor's suggestion in the archive header (9f8cf2), REV102's superseded rounds now live on their own page, [Design Review / Archive / REV102](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); the original archive is closed as the REV101 archive. REV102 r1 moved there verbatim; REV101 r8–r1 untouched. One page per task, none growing without limit.
| REV102-6 — what opens the junction gate: panel through the valve, or a discharge only | REV102 r2 | **Open** (one sentence) |
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| Minor — §13 mote count | REV102 r1 | Open (trivial) |
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## PM report — REV102 r2
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- **Task:** REV102. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV102 r2 (this page), In review; REV102 r1 moved to the Archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Design Document d35209 in full, diffed against c4ad51; canonical pages unchanged; World r10 unchanged; REF102 and TRL101 as data.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Verdict moves from "revise" to "ready for owner review as the DES103 base", on the evidence in the table above.
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- **Evidence:** section-by-section verification of each REV102 r1 issue against r3's text; the junction-gate reading checked against clauses 1–2; the §13 charge trace re-run. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Remaining risk:** REV102-6 (one sentence); PM's routing ruling still open; the specialist pages could cross again if either redraws, which r3's ownership rule now forbids.
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- **Next handoff:** lead — REV102-6 and the mote count in r4, then the DES103 pitch on top of it; PM — confirm the DES103 route and the routing model; owner — §17. I review DES103 when it exists and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** confirm that DES102 r3 (plus REV102-6) is the DES103 base, so the next artifact is a pitch, not a rewrite.
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| REV101 Findings 1–5, Secondary 1–5, N1–N17 | REV101 r1–r7 | Resolved, closed, or delivered in DES102 |
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| REV102-1 to -5 | REV102 r1 | Resolved at DES102 r3/r4 |
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| REV102-6 — what opens the junction gate | REV102 r2 | **Resolved at DES102 r5** |
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| Minor — §13 mote count | REV102 r1 | Resolved at r4 |
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| Trivial — "nine rounds" in the owner summary | REV102 r3 | Wording |
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## PM report — REV102 r3
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- **Task:** REV102, complete pending acceptance. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV102 r3 (this page); r2 moved to the REV102 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Design Document 46b320 and bc134b, diffed against d35209; World and Mystery 23dca9, diffed against c6f059; canonical pages unchanged.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Verdict unchanged from r2 and now confirmed on r5.
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- **Evidence:** diff-based verification of each r4/r5 change against the REV102 r2 residuals; the owner summary read against the body; the §13 charge arithmetic re-run. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact.
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- **Remaining risk:** none from this review. Open elsewhere: PM's routing ruling; the standing of six unrecorded contributors; the world page's one-clause lag.
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- **Next handoff:** PM — accept DES102 at r5 and say whether DES103 is r5's summary layer as it stands or a further artifact; the routing ruling. Lead — the one word in the summary. World designer — mirror §2's junction clause. I review DES103 only if it is more than what r5 already carries, and otherwise post nothing before OWN102 except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** accept DES102 at r5 and record whether DES103 is open on it.
