2026-09-07 13:23:53
Anonymous:
Remove 517 words of submission status, provenance and handoff under the owner's 2026-09-07 instruction that discussion moves to chat and articles stay on the design. Removed: What was reviewed; PM report — REV106 r1. Nothing is lost: the full text is at revision 615c4d and in history, and a pointer to it is left on the page. No design content, rule or example was touched - only sections whose content is who submitted what, what was read, and who owes whom a reply.
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**REV106 · r1 · 2026-09-07 09:55 UTC · Independent Design Critic · In review** — the vision review Tasks (888ac1, PMU008) assigns this role: "does the described play deliver the stated identity, and what is its strongest contradiction?" — on **the Visionary's submission at Brief 6d869e**: the Game vision (the game, the theme as amended, the feeling, one story, the recurring player experience, what earns a place, the decision test), the concrete return "One return, in plain language", and the current vision pass. PMR009 §1 accepts the return "as the first concrete vision contribution" and asks the Critic and Reader to assess it now, each within their role. It is read against the scene it retells, **Campaign r9 (93f482, DES105 r4) §3.2**, and the design as it stands; the Reader's first-read account (Clarity 5e56f8) is cited, not repeated. **REV105 is closed out below** at Campaign r9 and the Exchange r4 (17dca3), with PMR009's qualifications of r3 owned. REV105 r3–r1 are on the [REV105 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV105); REV104 r6–r1 on the [REV104 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV104); REV103 r5–r1 on the [REV103 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV103); REV102 r6–r1 on the [REV102 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive/REV102); REV101 r8–r1 on the [REV101 archive](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/Archive); every revision is in [page history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history) (REV105 r3 265a09 · r2 42ad46 · r1 35cccf · REV104 r6 ce94e4 · … · REV101 r1 7ad187).
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## What was reviewed
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| **Brief — Game vision; One return, in plain language; Current vision pass** | 6d869e | 09:07 | Read in full; diffed against 0fff74 (the theme amended; the return added; the pass recorded) |
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| **Campaign — DES105 r4 (page r9)** | 93f482 | 09:30 | Diffed against 0cafb9: the changed return rewritten to X37 (the stairs; the harvest as a priced experiment; the berth exit's issue); the later return's branch accounting; §3.4's cadence and terminals |
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| **The Exchange r4** | 17dca3 | 09:18 | Diffed against 4d6703: six issued cells; links and priority at the dock; the field bundle; the distances |
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| **PMR009** | 262856 | 09:17 | §1 the vision; §2 X37; §3 the Siphon and issue legality; §4 the support-assembly contest; §5 the Exchange |
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| Tasks; Team; Brief PMU008 | 888ac1; 0bff49; 6d869e | 09:25; 09:24 | This role's row; the chat-room instruction; the Visionary's mandate |
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| Clarity — the Reader's first-read account | 5e56f8 | 09:11 | Cited for what a reader could and could not retell |
| Combat r10; Enemies r11; World r27; Colony r7; Equipment; Build Paths; Utility Modules | a33732; 2c9af4; 7b8ad1; c56634; 122d38; f6f8ef; 4ffa18 | 08:50–09:22 | Headers and the passages PMR009 names; not re-reviewed |
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## REV106 — the vision, and the play it describes
### What the described play delivers
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| **REV106-2** — the return's equipment choice under the vision's own test | REV106 r1 | **Open** (Visionary: justify or drop the sentence; show the sacrifice where it works) |
| Minor — the Flood at first use; two plain names for two beacons | REV106 r1 | Open (Visionary; one clause each) |
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## PM report — REV106 r1
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- **Task:** the vision review PMU008 assigns, on the Visionary's submission at Brief 6d869e; REV105 closed out. **Artifact:** Design Review, REV106 r1 (this page); REV105 r3 moved to the REV105 archive verbatim.
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- **Reviewed:** Brief 6d869e in full and diffed against 0fff74; Campaign 93f482 diffed against 0cafb9, the changed return re-tallied and the later return's branches checked; the Exchange 17dca3 diffed against 4d6703 and its expedition re-tallied; PMR009 262856; Tasks 888ac1; Team 0bff49; Clarity 5e56f8 (the Reader's account); External Critique 2de127 (X37). All heads re-checked at save time.
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- **Changed decisions:** none by this role. Two misses in r3 owned.
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- **Evidence:** the quoted sentences; the tallies. No players, sessions, scores or asset checks; nothing built, prototyped, tested or created; no external source verified or repeated as fact; no claim about a newcomer's comprehension or the owner's reaction.
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- **Verdict:** on the vision — revise: REV106-1 (the first visit before the return, in the same plain words; the cost somewhere else in one sentence) and REV106-2 (the Siphon sentence justified or dropped); the identity is well stated and the return delivers its understanding half. On the Tram sequence — closed at 93f482 apart from one sentence. On the Exchange — three of REV104-17's four cells closed; two numbers remain.
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- **Remaining risk:** the vision's next pass (following the intervention home) may change what the return is for; REV106-1 is about what the owner is shown, and stands whichever return is chosen.
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- **Next handoff:** Visionary — REV106-1, -2 and the two minor clauses; lead — the one sentence; Campaign designer — the two numbers; PM — the owner has directed discussion to the hold-the-flood chat room (Team 0bff49); this role reads it and posts nothing there until its owner says so. I review the next vision revision and any successor of the pages above when they exist, and post nothing before then except a PM correction. **One exact PM request:** none.
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*517 words of submission status, provenance and handoff were removed from this page on 2026-09-07 by the wiki editor, under the owner's instruction that discussion belongs in [chat](/Chat%20Rooms) and articles belong to the design. Sections removed: *What was reviewed*, *PM report — REV106 r1*. **Nothing is lost** — the full text is at [revision 615c4d](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review?revision=615c4d) and in this page's [history](/Hold%20The%20Flood/Design%20Review/history). Discussion continues in the `hold-the-flood` room.*
